Graduate / I am an undergraduate from Electrical background with 1.5 years of experience; Statement of purpose [21]

Thank you for the swift response.

Graduate / I am an undergraduate from Electrical background with 1.5 years of experience; Statement of purpose [21]

Thank you for the enthusiastic reply. So heres my draft in which i try to connect my experience with the environment study.
Although, being an Electrical engineer requires the skills and abilities to properly connect one form of energy to another energy, the essence of this task lies in how effeciently one can have this 'energy' get flowing i.e without any extraneous loss. Isn't that the fundamental principle of the nature, air, water, land intermingling with each other to produce a progressive climate. And when this natural process is disturbed we hear of natural calamities. Therefore, all i am trying to say that if we can control the elements of nature we could bolster our earth.

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Graduate / I am an undergraduate from Electrical background with 1.5 years of experience; Statement of purpose [21]

Academic Statement of Purpose
In my quest to make a significant contribution towards the advancement in science and technology, I envision myself furthering the good of mankind as well pushing the boundaries of knowledge. I am applying for the Master of Science program at Institute Of Technology with the aim of achieving my goal with unyielding commitment, diligence and dedicated education and research.

I am a graduate student with a Bachelor's degree in Electrical Engineering from Institute of Technology, India. The ultimate measure of a man is not where he stands in moments of comfort,but where he stands at times of challenge.Fortunately,I have faced a lot of them and left no stones unturned in my career path.Through my hard work I gained entry into Institute Of technology-one of the most prestigious technical schools in India.

My application to Institute Of Technology for my MS in Sustainable Engineering and Environment,Health and Safety is based upon my realization of my areas of interest that have developed over my undergraduate term.

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Graduate / I am an undergraduate from Electrical background with 1.5 years of experience; Statement of purpose [21]

PLease help vangiespen!!!!!!!!!!!! Awaiting for your reply....

Graduate / I am an undergraduate from Electrical background with 1.5 years of experience; Statement of purpose [21]

My undergraduate major in Electrical Engineering have exposed me to its variegated and myriad sub fields-Sustainable and Environment. Though a major in Electrical, I have a solid base in the Energy generation, transmission and Distribution which is the fundamental base of the Sustainable and Environment Cycle.

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Graduate / I am an undergraduate from Electrical background with 1.5 years of experience; Statement of purpose [21]

So ur telling me that i have to add one paragraph of relating my future research study with the university's? And that will be all? I am really bored to death writing this sop...and i am glad that you are helping me..

Graduate / I am an undergraduate from Electrical background with 1.5 years of experience; Statement of purpose [21]

My undergraduate major in Electrical Engineering have exposed me to its variegated and myriad sub fields-Sustainable and Environment. Though a major in Electrical, I have a solid base in the Energy generation, transmission and Distribution which is the fundamental base of the Sustainable and Environment Cycle. The charm of extending the frontiers of knowledge in rapidly growing field of Sustainability and Environment has induced in me an interest to pursue for higher studies. To satiate this curiosity and to embark upon a rewarding career in this field, I consider graduate study in Sustainable Engineering a prime requisite.

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Graduate / I am an undergraduate from Electrical background with 1.5 years of experience; Statement of purpose [21]

with reference to omiting my college reference background,Wont the admission officers will recognise that I am an individual that believes in the holistic improvement? I dint waste any of my summer breaks during my college time and you are saying to me to just omit them.Isn' t it better that I somehow Connect it to the masters course going to be undertaken?

Graduate / I am an undergraduate from Electrical background with 1.5 years of experience; Statement of purpose [21]

Please look out the two new major edits that i have done---first one is,as u told me to do,to connect the future research project with the major.And second is the relationship of my industrial training with my major.Awaiting for you response.

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My undergraduate major in Electrical Engineering have exposed me to its variegated and myriad sub fields-Sustainable and Environment. Though a major in Electrical, I have a solid base in the Energy generation, transmission and Distribution which is the fundamental base of the Sustainable and Environment Cycle. The charm of extending the frontiers of knowledge in rapidly growing field of Sustainability and Environment has induced in me an interest to pursue for higher studies. To satiate this curiosity and to embark upon a rewarding career in this field, I consider graduate study in Sustainable Engineering a prime requisite.

During my final semester I worked on Hybridisation Of Ultra Capacitors to create a smart power System and also on the use of a battery-supercapacitor hybrid connection to improve run-time in mobile applications.

First,Through a critical survey of the literature for the supercapacitors energy storage system for improvement of power quality of different systems;an overview has been presented, such as to provide ride through, stabilization of power system, to make power dispatchable, to improve power quality of weak transportation system,in stand alone for the short term outage,have been discussed. Therefore, it would prove a good energy storage option for power quality maintenance purpose with power conditioning system despite high cost,life span and its efficiency being very high.

Second,The run-time extension is achieved due to the reduction in the battery internal losses. The direct battery-supercapacitor parallel connection method was proposed and evaluated.It was shown that by the parallel connection of battery and supercapacitor, a decrease in battery current of 20.9% was possible.Thus, this has the effect of increasing the battery run time.

Rochester Institute Of Technology has always been at the forefront in the field of Sustainable Engineering. The exemplary faculty and the extraordinary research work conducted at GIS have convinced me that it is the perfect platform for me to pursue my goals. I am deeply impressed with the work done by the NPRL(Nano Power research Lab) and NYSP2I(New York State Pollution Prevention Institute) group at the x. I believe with my background in Electrical engineering I could contribute immensely to the research of new materials and devices for power generation and storage for micro-electronic and micro -electromechanical systems. At the same time I will be exposed to the array of new technologies currently in use and thus it leaves no doubt that Rochester Institute of Technology would be an intellectual Utopia for me. I would also like to study under Professors Dr. X and Dr. Y and feel that my own interests are well aligned with their work.The purpose and ultimate goal of my research project shall focus on the fundamental development and testing of a300 Wh/kg CNT-based battery. The ability to utilize carbon nanotubes allows for a 2X increase over today's current battery energy density. Specifically, the program developments will lead to fabrication of such cells using CNT electrodes with enhanced performance. It is expected that suitable electrode designs will maximize battery energy and power density while preserving cycle performance.Since Engineering for Sustainable development is a multi criteria decision making process that involves the identification of the most optimal sustainable process,which satisfies economic,ecological,social criteria as well as safety and health requirements. Certain difficulties are encountered when Sustainable development is applied such as ill defined criteria, scarcity of information, lack of process specific data,metrics,and the need to satisfy multiple decision makers.I hope Research centre at Rit will help me to develop new approach/methodology to overcome these difficulties.

My decision to apply for M.S. in Sustainable Engineering was not a quick decision. It has been built over a long time with deep thinking and continuous sought. It started when I attended summer Industrial trainings. My first training was with Oil and Natural Gas Corporation where I studied the cogeneration plant comprehensively. The objective was to analyze the performance of the gas turbine employed in the plant and calculate its maximum efficiency and then analyze the various industrial limitations which prevent the plant from running at full efficiency. My second training was at Tata Motors Limited, Where I carried out a comprehensive ARC Flash analysis, to provide correct data for appropriate labeling of the electrical Panels in Facility. This Labeling dictates the level of PPE (Personal Protective Equipment) and distance that must be maintained while working on exposed live parts. The arc flash study and the Labeling of panels are the cornerstone of Electrical safety management system. To Sum up, the major in Engineering for sustainable development would have helped me in breaking down the task into three major steps,starting with life cycle assessment(LCA) of the process, followed by generation of non-dominating alternatives,and finally selecting the most sustainable process by employing an analytical hierarchical selection process.

After graduating First class(Distinction) with a CGPA of 7.03 on a scale of 10, I joined Bhushan Steel Limited, an Indian Steel Manufacturing major through rigorous campus placement process. I underwent a rigorous training process at this corporation. This training included an intensive 4 week apprentice training where a wide range of subjects pertaining to the Steel industry were taught and we received hands-on training in the Field to understand the various difficulties encountered by the workers as well the limitations of the machinery.

I am currently working as a Junior manager in the Raw Materials Handling department. My commodity is Stacker cum Reclaimer and I personally handle parts like Generators,Motors,Hydraulics and Overall Safe working of the machine and labors which are present on this machine. The further stages involve maintaining Environment,Health and Safety, an important part of the job as the Raw materials site is in itself very dusty(Asbestos dust), which is the inherent hazard in this sector .With this job I hope to get a significant amount of industrial exposure and insight into the working of the steel sector.

Because of being involved in a Hazardous workplace and the kind of environment which I am exposed to in my daily job routines I decided to gain Highly recognized Nebosh(National Examination board of occupational health and safety) diploma recognised by professional membership bodies including the Institution of Occupational Safety and Health (IOSH)], the International Institute of Risk & Safety Management (IIRSM) and the Institute of Environmental Management and Assessment (IEMA) to have a professional knowledge in this field,so that I could actually efficate the proper Working conditions and behavior of workers towards the Health and safety.Furhthermore, During my job I realized that I am an individual who's interested in multi-disciplinary field and gets enticed by the idea of correlating chemistry,biology,electrical etc. elements in a workplace.

My persistent drive and a deep rooted desire for innovation and original research are the characteristic traits that, in my opinion, indicate my fit into this esteemed university. My exposure to different aspects of technology, due to my technical projects and my practical exposure to the industrial world, provides me with the factor that sets me apart from other applicants of the same caliber. I would like to pursue a career wherein I can work towards the welfare of the society by application of my engineering knowledge and I believe INSTITUTE would be a stepping stone to this career.

Desiring to keep myself abreast of the latest developments in the field of Sustainable and Environment,the aim of achieving perfection has been the main reason for opting to apply for your University.

Graduate / I am an undergraduate from Electrical background with 1.5 years of experience; Statement of purpose [21]

Thank you!!!! you inputs have been very helpful to my essay...will do the necessary changes.At last I have to add few lines about my undergraduate College ranking and few strong points to offset the GRE marks.As I scored a lil low from the bar but the college advisor says we have admitted students in past,so IF YOU CAN HELP ME with starting phrases to tackle this situation would be helpful!!!! My College ranking is among top 15 in my country.Awaiting...