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Name: Shima You
Joined: Jan 23, 2015
Last Post: Feb 2, 2015
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From: Korea, Republic of
School: Imam khomeini

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Shima97   
Jan 23, 2015
Undergraduate / The importance of human body for the mankind -My biomedical / biomaterial S.O.P [5]

Hello ,would you please help me by reviewing my s.o.p and letting me know my mistakes and also any suggestions/corrections would
be appreciated. or some thing to add ,etc.

From thousands of years ago, the body, its shape, how it functions and its complex and well organized system, has been so important for the humankind for the purpose of survive, and it must be especially more important for female because of beautify.

Herein as based on a report published by the Times magazine, Italian excavation group have announced the gilded 5000 year-old artificial eye discovered in the ancient Burnt city of southeast Iran (my country) belonged to a young female (2800 BC!) so, nowadays in an era where science flourishes and it's use as a base to solve all of mankind's problems, I should be more interested in biological fields specifically biomaterial, which is my favorite field of interest as a young girl in 21 century .

Besides, I took art classes when I was in high school and it help me out to make my mind more creative and also subtlety. Furthermore my robotic class, that I had this chance to be my team leader, instruct me how to work on a team and how to lead and manage it.

Fortunately my close relatives' jobs are one of the effective reasons that influenced on me to choose biomaterial. For instance my parents are both professor in occupational health and safety and history filed, so they learned me about the history of science and the utility of that, learning about health effect of substances on human, several book that they read for me in my childhood, and my 10th birthday's best gifts that were a series of encyclopedia, my researches and simple examinations in our garden and also my favorite TV programs "documentary" have been my best source to learn more of science.

More over my grand aunt is nurse and she is one of those kind one, I love her as she do love me too, so when I was younger I spent most of my free time with her in children hospital, it was a good situation for me to being more familiar with hospital and talking and playing with inpatient kids. Also every time that we went to the Seoul national university children hospital (SNUH) to check the status of my sister's closed intramedullary nailing and I saw the kind behavior of nurses, I remembered my aunt.

Another thing to consider in my interest to studying biomaterial should be the fact that I'm already using one of its product "my tooth crown".it helps me to eat easier and make my life better. As regards it is just one of the simplest product of biomaterial that do a noteworthy roll in daily life.

The last but not the least reason for me to love studying biomaterial major is to finding a better way for drug delivery, especially for those acute and chronic disease, because my best friend had been diagnosed with breath cancer, during her chemotherapy she always complained of suffering from weakness, fatigue, nausea, vomiting and three more significant symptoms that they must be harder for a young girl, such as hair loss, dry skin and nail brittle.

So I hope due to my future studies and researches, I found a drug without at least this side effects.
Shima97   
Feb 1, 2015
Undergraduate / The importance of human body for the mankind -My biomedical / biomaterial S.O.P [5]

Hello.
here is another request .
would you please reviewing my essay because I've been inform that my personal statemet should be written clearly and in detail on one (or more) of the listed topic below.so I want to know if there is any similarity between my text and this topices? if it is , so please let me know my mistakes.if it is possible.

1.Discuss the disappointments, failure, or risks in your life so far and your responses to them.
2.Describe some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you.

Shima97   
Feb 2, 2015
Poetry / war is a devil | war could burn you like a flame | BANG! do you hear the gun, who do we blame? [4]

oh my God
that's awesome.
I really enjoy it.
any way you can check the link below but just put ( https:// ) before that !
jerz.setonhill.edu/writing/creative1/poetry-writing-tips-how-to-write-a-poem/
also here is some hints for writting a good poem :
Use comparisons. Tell what something reminds you of - maybe the moon reminds you of a pizza pan. You could say "The moon shines like a pizza pan."

Use personification. Pretend what you are writing about is human. "The wind munches the leaves..."
Let your poem do what it wants. Don't try to hold it too tightly to the subject you started with. Let it lead you where it wants to go.

Try "being" what you want to write about. Pretend you are a cat... a car... a basketball...
Keep a journal.
Keep paper and pencil with you at all times.
Keep trying!
Don't try too hard. Just write. It doesn't have to be "good". But every once in a while, it may be!

Use repetition. Or don't.
Use rhyme. Or don't.
Use lively verbs.
Use interesting words, but don't strain too hard for the unusual.
Love words!
Write about what you really want to write about.
Revise - but not too much.
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