Graduate / Reason for applying Global Leaders Program. 'Learning is a never ending process'. [5]

Hi Ammar,

Thanks a lot for your feedback. This is really helping me a lot. I've made many changes in my essay especially the first paragraph ( I changed all ). How do you think ? Once again, thanks

Globalization is playing an increasingly important role in our lives these days. People all over the world are becoming closer than ever before. Goods and services that appear in a country will be immediately promoted in the others. Furthermore, globalization also creates an aggressive competition in industry and being a leader in this globalization era is my professional objectives.

My major academic interest is Computer Science. During my bachelor degree completion, most of the subjects I took helped me to deepen my understanding on Computer Science world. Information Technology Management for example has taught me the rigorous reasoning involved in logical thinking of which Computers are the perfect mechanized model.

Along with my college life, I began to look for opportunity in professional world to overcome my curiosity on how computer science being applied in real life. I started my professional career in 2008 as an IT staff in one of the company in Indonesia. Based on my work, sooner I was then promoted to become Senior Infrastructure Engineer.

After graduating my Bachelor Degree, I switched the company and due to previous experience I was hired as IT Supervisor. These several positions allowed me to learn many new things in professional aspect, starting from how to balance and delegate task effectively, interpersonal skills and how critical teamwork and quick decision making in business.

As well as spending time both studying and working before, I then realized that mostly what I learned in my college life is technical skills. In professional world, not only that we need the technical skills, but leadership and management skills are also important for a person to become an effective leader. Participating in Global Leaders for Innovation and Knowledge Program will help me to dig deeper my leadership and management skills as well as sharpen it. This program would pave the way for me, provides me the opportunities to explore, to be creative and to improve the potential I have. This would be a perfect approach to develop systematic understanding of self development growth and how they would support me to achieve my future goals

Through the program's three pillars (Management Theory, Liberal Arts, and Methodology & Practice), I expect gaining lots of in-depth knowledge either theoretically or practically to prepare myself to become a future leader. The core module taught would help me deepen my understanding in developing the judge value and the skills of deciding and acting on the spot. Beside the knowledge itself, I also believe that I could improve myself socially such as making new international friends, exchanging knowledge and culture.

Graduate / Reason for applying Global Leaders Program. 'Learning is a never ending process'. [5]

Thanks, Amma. Really appreciate your help. Can any one other please have a comment on my essay ?

Essays / Describe how you are going to contribute to your community by using full knowledge obtained [4]

I believe you should examine your current community issue first. Explaining about country rather than community would seems to wide for your area in my opinion.

But well, I'm still new in creating essay. Consider other people's opinion as well

Undergraduate / 'I was building robots' - UMASS Mechanical Engineering Common App Transfer Essay [2]

here is my opinion. I'm still new to essay anyway

Since a very young age, I demonstrated an interest in engineeringI have been interested in engineering since I was very young .

From the time I could walk, I was buildinghave already started to build robots and airplanes from legos and wooden blocks.

Through my many years of experience I have developed a keen ability to overcome obstacles when designing or fabricating something.

I crave for a challenging situations where only logical thinking and the ability to think outside the box will lead to a solution.

Well, that's my opinion. I guess you should consider others as well