Letters / Excluded from Uni 7 years ago - Readmission Letter [6]

Hi Everyone,

Here is my rough draft of a readmission letter that I will submit tomorrow, please be honest and harsh with your feedback.

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Dear Sir or Madam:

I am writing this letter in anticipation that you will consider my appeal for readmission into xxx University's Bachelor Degree of "International Business" commencing July 2015.

I attended xxx University back in 2008 after leaving high school. At the time I was immature and naïve and assumed the path I had chosen was the right one. Unfortunately the timing wasn't right and I had no motivation to attend or focus on my studies. I made the mistake of not withdrawing and therefore accumulating fails against all subjects, now evident on my transcript.

Over the past 7 years I have had a lot of hands on work experience dealing in retail sales, labouring, and more expertly and recently in real estate sales. During this time, I have travelled through Japan, Europe and the United States and gained an understanding

I realise now that without a degree I'll never reach my educational potential and build the lifestyle I desire for my future. I am self-assured that my readmission and desire for personal success will pave the way to outstanding achievements and coupled with xx XY Star rating, I believe will broaden my career opportunities, landing a position with an international leading firm.

Finally, I strongly ask that you consider an exemption for my previous marks. If I am readmitted this term I will not be content with a mere pass, I want to strive for top of class marks and prove to myself and future potential employers, that I will be an asset to their organisation.

Thank you for taking the time to consider this appeal.

Yours sincerely

Letters / Letter of plea for transcript to be wiped. [2]

Firstly, thank you to those who posted on my last thread. I have been accepted back into University!

My major concern now is my existing GPA from failure to withdraw back in 2008. I am re-entering the same degree of International Business. I am writing a letter based explaining my extenuating circumstances based on a personal living situation. I have been told by a student advisor to elaborate and be quite emotional in my letter of appeal. I need YOUR help, as I am having trouble constructing my letter. Here is what I have so far.

I am writing this statement in anticipation that you will consider my appeal to have my transcript expunged from my academic record.

I attended University back in 2008 after leaving high school and assumed it was the natural path of progression. Which was in hindsight a poor choice, but it was what I felt I had to do, especially since I was trying to get away from an unfavourable family situation, whenever possible. A couple months into my first semester I was kicked out of home. Thankfully, one of my close friends was happy to put me up temporarily. However, It wasn't long before there was strain on our friendship with no income to pay for board/food and I was forced to look for full time work to support myself, or I'd be on the street.

I obtained full time employment and unfortunately didn't re-attend university again. Even though my family circumstances led to my absence, my biggest mistake was not withdrawing after my first semester, which in hindsight I would do anything to change. After I found out I had been re-admitted to XXX University this semester I was overwhelmed with anticipation and cannot wait to commence study. However, my motivation will be crushed if the hindrance of my extremely low GPA holds me back from pursuing my educational potential.

I am pleading...*please help finish*