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Jun 8, 2015
Writing Feedback / Automobiles, bicycles, airplanes - which transport form has changed people's lives the most? [4]
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12. Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people's lives.
* automobiles
* bicycles
* airplanes
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, transportation vehicles are increasingly developing and modern which have considerable influence on people's life. However, in my opinion, bicycles have changed people's life drastically. First, considering the past, bicycles were the first transportation vehicles invented before any today vehicles. They were invented in the early 19th century with simple parts; however, in that time, they were so luxurious facilities that its appearance changed people's life which took a step for inventing more modern vehicles. Second, driving bicycles is good for health, which people today always want to achieve. Many researchers show that riding bicycle helps against heart diseases, high blood preasure, ... because when we move continuously, redundant fat in your body will be consumed, which keeps fit. This is the reason, nowadays the old is always encouraged to ride bicycle in order to have a healthier life. Last but not least, riding bicycle is friendly to environment which people are trying to maintain. Specially, in modern life, when the environment is increasingly destroyed by people's awful actions, beside the vehicles such as motorbikes, cars, airplanes, ... which absorb much fuel, bicycles are the best choice to keep environment fresh. In the nutshell, although there are always new vehicles invented, bicycles keep an irreplaceable role in our life because they has changed people's lives from the past with being the first vehicles and their benefits to people's health and environment.
my writing is very bad so that i'll be very happy if you can read and give me some advice. thank you so much !
12. Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people's lives.
* automobiles
* bicycles
* airplanes
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, transportation vehicles are increasingly developing and modern which have considerable influence on people's life. However, in my opinion, bicycles have changed people's life drastically. First, considering the past, bicycles were the first transportation vehicles invented before any today vehicles. They were invented in the early 19th century with simple parts; however, in that time, they were so luxurious facilities that its appearance changed people's life which took a step for inventing more modern vehicles. Second, driving bicycles is good for health, which people today always want to achieve. Many researchers show that riding bicycle helps against heart diseases, high blood preasure, ... because when we move continuously, redundant fat in your body will be consumed, which keeps fit. This is the reason, nowadays the old is always encouraged to ride bicycle in order to have a healthier life. Last but not least, riding bicycle is friendly to environment which people are trying to maintain. Specially, in modern life, when the environment is increasingly destroyed by people's awful actions, beside the vehicles such as motorbikes, cars, airplanes, ... which absorb much fuel, bicycles are the best choice to keep environment fresh. In the nutshell, although there are always new vehicles invented, bicycles keep an irreplaceable role in our life because they has changed people's lives from the past with being the first vehicles and their benefits to people's health and environment.