Undergraduate / Need help on my admissions essay - Art Institute, San Francisco [14]

Here is the link to what I needed to write about: artinstitutes.edu/sanfrancisco/pdf/Application_Essay.pdf

I am afraid that it's going to be too long or that is doesn't sound right. Please help!!

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It would be difficult to explain my passion for fashion without first telling you about my childhood and the lessons I have learned. At the tender age of nine, I was living in Alaska, which to some may not be the home of high fashion. For me, it was a world of creativity awaiting discovery. I spent many hours sitting outside of my Barbie dollhouse making clothing for a fashion show that I would later share with my dogs. Having never seen a fashion show or even a fashion magazine, even now I find this a marvel. I knew not what I was doing, it just felt "right". Though my world then consisted of my three dogs and crippled Barbies, I had an undying need to create clothing that would be shared and seen by the rest of my world. The dogs would sit patiently waiting for the show to be over, so that they might add a few Barbies to the crippled group. This lead to me design clothes for the armless, footless, and headless dolls of doggy war. Lessons learned: Do not leave Barbie dolls in places dogs can reach, always create clothing out of scrap material, and do what feels "right", because in the end Happiness is all we have to offer each other.

Already knowing my true passion in life, my career goal is simple: I want to be the next Betsy Johnson. Creating clothing with flare that leaves a lasting impression and has the ability to show off the personality of the person wearing it...well that's just what feels right to me. I want to change the way people view suits and business items; they need to become modern and fresh. I hope to create a style that expresses the drive and desire of the young entrepreneurs of this world. I want to change the way people view fashion as a whole. Fashion is sex and sex sells fashion, so I want to create clothing that makes any gender, race or body type look sexy. I want to invent styles that inspire people to go out of their house, make new friends and put their lives on the runway. After all, being comfortable in your own skin is the ultimate desire of most people, they just want to feel right with the world.

I know that my life goals will only be achieved by going back to school. There are many reasons why the Art Institute will help me achieve my career goals; my number one goal being to obtain a job that I love and am inspired to go to. I want a job where I can grow as a person and as a designer, to be in a place where I am not afraid to stand on my own two feet and voice my opinion on what looks good and what does not. I currently work in a law firm, solely for the paycheck. No matter how hard I try I know that my conversation skills and wiliness to help will not change the lives of the people I talk too over the phone. I may brighten their day for just a moment but I want to brighten their lives forever. The Art Institute will give me the necessary skills needed for me to change the world. If I can make someone's day I little bit brighter with a smile or hug, I can't wait to see what I can do when I make a person feel comfortable in their own skin; letting them know that they ARE good enough, brave enough, pretty enough and amazing enough. To know that people are walking around happier in clothing that I have designed just because it makes them feel good is my ultimate goal. This choice to take the first step in going to the Art Institute of San Francisco is a perfect fit for me. It feels "right" to have the opportunity to attend such an amazing school that will teach me the skills to become a better person. ( Should I put this in?? The Art Institute will help me with my career goals immensely. From offering smaller class sizes to the amazing labs and career driven lessons, there is no doubt in my mine that I will accomplish every goal that I set my mind to do, no matter how big. I love the idea of having a school that will help get students get started on their career even before they have graduated. The flexibility of class times for those who work is truly amazing as well.)

I plan to participate and commit to my education in every way possible to develop my skill set and mindset to be successful. I will join clubs to meet others with the same passions and to provide help and advice when needed. I will be dedicated to my work and it's quality, so that I may represent the school to the best of my ability in the real world. I will take my passion and apply it to my everyday life by making clothing that people can feel great about and by designing clothing that will be remembered by centuries to come. I will do my best to help the other students achieve their goals as I achieve mine. If we, the students, teachers and faculty, can work together as a team, we will create amazing concepts and redefine the industry. I believe in hard work and dedication, and I will never settle for less than the best.

Martin Luther King once said, "Take the first step in faith. You don't have to see the whole staircase, just take the first step." I am truly touched by this statement as I take my first step toward a new life. I am antsy and excited for what may developed around the bends and curves of this windy road. I know that by taking this first step into a new life, that I am taking the first step into changing the world. I am committing myself in to doing what is right and I am more then willing to do whatever it takes to make this world a better place. I know my transformation will be difficult and that there will be times that I want to cry. I am glad that this will develop me into an individual with the skill set and mindset to reach for and achieve my every goal. I am ready to start learning at your amazing school and excited to see how I can change the world.