Earthyrain
Oct 24, 2015
Writing Feedback / Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media rich society [2]
Media is atwo-sided sword. double-edged
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I like your approach and organization; however I think your answer is a bit too formulaic. Your general essay follows an effect, example, introduction to next effect style, and, in my opinion, combining some sentences, adding more commentary, and showing a bit of why these effects are important to you and society would be beneficial to both the flow and add personality.
Media is a
The other mistakes were caught by singr7.
I like your approach and organization; however I think your answer is a bit too formulaic. Your general essay follows an effect, example, introduction to next effect style, and, in my opinion, combining some sentences, adding more commentary, and showing a bit of why these effects are important to you and society would be beneficial to both the flow and add personality.