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Name: Ashwini Srinivasaprasad
Joined: Oct 25, 2015
Last Post: Nov 19, 2015
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School: Deeksha Int

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alexlestrange   
Oct 25, 2015
Undergraduate / 'My eyes sparkled as I looked at the body' University of California essay [2]

Prompt - Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

My eyes sparkled as I looked at the body. I didn't know which part to explore first - like a kid in a toy store. I ran my hands against the body and picked up a small component and recognized it at once - ZTB455K - it was a supersonic heterodyne. Funny how I could remember the name of that convoluted component but couldn't remember to put my retainers on every night. Then again, I spent nearly my entire childhood dismantling devices. This wasn't the first TV remote I'd broken open.

At age 11, I received 2 gifts (now that I look back, probably the best ones) - The Harry Potter franchise and a screwdriver. My grandfather was an electrical engineer and he always brought home convoluted machinery and opened them up to check for defects. I always hung around whenever he did so and learnt the ritzy names of a lot of components. I watched him for hours as he worked on elevator schematics at home, wondering what all the various symbols and lines meant. I was fascinated by technology and wanted to know how and why things worked the way they did. Noticing my intellectual curiosity, my grandfather decided to present me his first screwdriver as a family heirloom, of sorts. He taught me to unscrew screws and encouraged me to open up electronic devices and explore away. I'd hawk around to find damaged radios, remotes, watches, CD players and spend hours together disassembling them and learning about the components inside. Harry Potter became an all-consuming obsession. Soon, my life was just reading and dismantling. As I read, I drew some parallels: Like Harry used his wand to enter the magical world, I used my screwdriver to enter my own micro world. While Harry was a wizard, I fancied myself as a mechanic. And the thought stuck - I was going to grow up to be a mechanic; because being a mechanic meant that I would never stop learning and would never get bored again. When people usually learnt of this, they chuckled and patted my head sympathetically. My teacher also dubbed it as 'lack of ambition'. I was also reckoned as somewhat of an oddity among my friends. Not many girls wanted to fraternize with girl whose idea of a playground was a jumble of old circuit boards, spare electric wire, and an assortment of broken appliances. But, my parents were thoroughly supportive of their little girl running around with a screwdriver in her pocket. They also got me enrolled in a simple mechanics course where I learnt about the different types of circuits. Bolstered by my family's approval, I went on to build a Fridge-door light circuit with the help of my grandfather but used it to light up my closet instead. It is from my family that I leant the power of unconditional support and insatiable curiosity.

Changing times brought new technologies and new innovations. This changed my interests but did not change but my ambition. If anything, these tech advents have given my dream meaning. A mechanic is a tradesman, craftsman or technician who uses tools to build or repair machinery. I want to be an entrepreneurial mechanic who uses tools to build machinery that will make our lives simpler. 'Less is more' is the mantra I live by. And using technology (Internet of Things) for the simple expedient of finding your misplaced car keys or ID card on stressful morning is exactly the little way I'd like to contribute in making someone else's hustle a little easier. A small change, that's all that's required to make this world a better place.
alexlestrange   
Oct 25, 2015
Undergraduate / DEFINE RATHER THAN DEFEND [5]

Just a few tweaks with the last sentence.

I was also instrumental in establishing a biogas plant in my school. This not only enabled me to generate an alternative source of light to aid learning but also do my bit to ease the pressure of acute power shortage that the country is facing.

@justivy03 has covered all the other grammatical errors I came across while reading.
Great essay.
alexlestrange   
Nov 19, 2015
Undergraduate / Soap matters to me. It's not the object, it's what soap is representative of that matters. [5]

Stanford undergrad essay - what matters to you, and why?

What matters to me, and why? Finding a way to increase funding for schools for Czech Republic? Combating global terrorism? Solving the recurrent problem of water scarcity? Nope. Soap matters to me. It's not the object, it's what soap is representative of that matters. In many ways, humans are like soaps. Though of different shapes, colors and essences, they are used for one reason only - cleansing. Also, soaps bubbles often represent the transient nature of life.

During the Second World War, the Nazis killed the Jews and made soap out of their fat. With these soaps, the Nazis cleaned their bodies. Soap became a metaphor for Nazi cruelty. In a way, soaps were representative of human oppression and Jews' sacrifice.

In Chuck Palahniuk's novel, Fight Club, the protagonist Tyler Durden steals fat from the rich and sells it back to them in the form of soaps - a most twisted and subversive Robin Hood act. He wants to cleanse not only bodies but also the elitism and the arbitrary rules of the upper class society. Soap represents everything the humanity should be against and it is a pity we can't use these very soaps to cleanse the world of social evils.

When I discussed this with my grandpa, he called me a moron. Maybe, I should've written about world peace.
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