Undergraduate / Parents mistake - I rely on myself to get what I want to achieve. Personal statement [8]

Hey Katie,
I'm assuming these are for University of Washington? I'm applying there as well. I made some edits to word choice and sentence construction below, I hope they help! Overall, I think you have a great essay that accurately answers the first prompt!

Undergraduate / Disneyland vacation - Short response based on culture [9]

I would suggest possibly talking about the differences between your hometown and what you experienced in California, maybe you could talk about the benefit of different viewpoints.

On that note, maybe talk about just a difference of viewpoints/general backgrounds you have experienced in class and how they were beneficial. Or you could go the opposite direction and talk about how differences can cause harm in one of your communities.