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Posts by janet777
Name: Janet
Joined: Dec 26, 2015
Last Post: Dec 26, 2015
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From: China
School: BFSU

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janet777   
Dec 26, 2015
Graduate / A prospective "OSCAR" winner - Profile writing_MBA application [3]

Hi everyone! Here is my profile. I need you guys opinion on the content and use of words. Thanks!

"A profile is a brief summary of your curriculum vitae or résumé that will grab the reader's attention. Your profile should be 150-200 words and written in the third person."FYI.

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Being obliging, sincere, committed, analytical and resilient, Janet is a prospective "OSCAR" winner in her self-directed life.

With a strong interest in finance and accounting, Janet has extensive internship experience in financial advisory, consulting and public accounting. As a valuation associate working in a global financial advisory firm, she is equipped with valuation technique and strong analytical and problem solving skills. She also demonstrates strong adaptability as well as ability to learn fast and work efficiently under pressure. Having been worked with people from many different countries, she is collaborative in cross-culture communication. Currently, she is completing level one of the CFA designation.

Suffering of physical injury did not defeat her, instead she became more mature and self-motivated with a passion for learning and community. She has been committed to sustainability promotion as well as female leadership development. To live a happy and fulfilling life, she is driven, open-minded and grateful.

Janet is interested in a career opportunity where she could leverage her skill sets, such as investment banking, commercial banking, financial planning, business analysis and corporate development.
janet777   
Dec 26, 2015
Speeches / 'I'm interested in many things' - Introducing Myself [9]

Hi Ramzy,

Why not try to introduce more about your passion in Business Administration and why you are attracted to your target school? Adding these parts could make your intro more convincing.

Janet
janet777   
Dec 26, 2015
Undergraduate / Why Northwestern? It offers a top-tier education with its scenic lakefront campus [4]

Wendi,

Same as @vangiespen, I also think your why Northwestern essay could be better if you can add more personal connection with the university or the program. You may come up with some strong reasons to support why it could only be Northwestern instead of other universities. What Northwestern could provide to you and help you to achieve your dream?
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