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cons

Mar 18, 2017

Undergraduate / Personal statement for a BSW Program - reasons for BSW degree [3]

The second paragraph and last paragpaph are good enough to support your thesis but i have some suggestion for the first paragraph for you

~~I chose to seek a BSW degree because I was a high school dropout.~~
In the beginning of essay mostly people should show a positive sentence or idea to make the review interest.
It could be I choose to apply BSW progame because my personal experience as social worker

I watched as each one of my close friends walked across the stage to gather their certificates that represented all their hard work and success thus far.

I propose this to revise your sentence
I got motivated by my friend who get certificate after all their hard work so I looked for work. Unfortunately, no one could hire me without a high school education. Until one day, I insist to looked a solution on internet and found a program at Department of workforce Services, it was called WIOA Youth Program. With the help of this program I got my Diploma. I didn't get a fancy ceremony like my peers, but I cried tears of pure happiness when I received my High School Diploma in the mail.

cons

Mar 18, 2017

Writing Feedback / Education from parents and diversity - whether parents are the best teachers? [3]

hi @antonie8x

Your essay is pretty good which has clear thesis and well structured from beginning to the end of paragraph.
But I have some suggestion with the last paragraph

In conclusion, parents have so many characteristics that they can be recognized as the best teacher.
So many characteristics does not cope up with you previous thesis. I suggest It could be the quality time or other positive about parents that you wrote in the previous paragraph.

There are many explanations for this, but the elementary factors are comprehension of children's mind and diverse education.This the elementary factors are comprehension of children's mind and diverse education

cons

Mar 18, 2017

Scholarship / Reputable in linguistics - AAS - How did you choose your proposed course and institution? [2]

How did you choose proposed course and institution?

Linguistic Reputation

I am applying Master of Arts Linguistics in Australia because I join the project of development bahasa Indonesia to become an international language. As a delegation bahasa Indonesia for second learner teacher from Center for Language Strategy and Diplomacy Development (PPSDK) under the Ministry of Education and Culture Republic of Indonesia, the government demand an expert to face the challenge language planning and development outside Indonesia, especially in the language teaching and language learning.

First, I choose Master of Arts Linguistics in Australia because it is linear with my bachelor degree and my current job. My bachelor focused on linguistics that will support my future course that need prerequisite knowledge about basic linguistics. Moreover, my career as a bahasa Indonesia for second learner teacher is relevant with my bachelor degree so that it makes my linearity to the proposed course match one another.

Second, both of my occupation and my degree will support the government program to promoting bahasa Indonesia around the world especially in ASEAN country. Promoting bahasa Indonesia is not only about teaching but also macro linguistics aspect such as language and society to know social condition on the teaching country target so that makes teaching adapt with local nuance.

All that mentioned before are the reasons I proposed course Master of Arts Linguistics in Australia. Then, I decide two best university about that M. A. degree. The first one is ANU that have a strong research about language society in Asia Pacific. Even it has a research center about language and social studies so I can join its summer course to broaden my language in social context. The second option is AU. AU has an area specialization that will equip me with the specific course such as language teaching and language learning and Linguistics Functional Systemic in Education. The most important about courses are Australia has highly reputable in linguistics which fit my future career needs at Center for Language Strategy and Diplomacy Development.