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May 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / The maps indicate the changes of the village in Stokeford in two specific year of 1930 and 2010. [6]
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IELTS task1 (maps)-The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010.
my writing: (161 words in total)
The maps indicate the changes of the village in Stokeford in two specific year of 1930 and 2010.
It is apparent that it used to have two farmlands in the village in 1930, whereas all farms disappeared, replacing by newly constructed houses in 2010.
First looking at the map of 1930, the villagers lived alongside the River Stoke, and a main road with a bridge was built to connect the northern side of the river. In the western of the main road, few shops and a post office were established between houses, neighbor by a farmland. Another farmland was on the east side of the river. Large houses encompassed by gardens and a primary school could be seen in the west area as well.
Moving to the second map, in 2010, much scenery was turned into accommodations, including two farms and the shops. The grand villa and the primary school were expanded, while the former was converted its function to a retirement home.
Hi everyone, I'm new to the forum. Can't wait to communicate about essay writing with you.
Below is my first post, while I have no idea how to attach a picture of my ielts topic. So I pasted the link of the picture....hope it works!
IELTS task1 (maps)-The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010.
my writing: (161 words in total)
The maps indicate the changes of the village in Stokeford in two specific year of 1930 and 2010.
It is apparent that it used to have two farmlands in the village in 1930, whereas all farms disappeared, replacing by newly constructed houses in 2010.
First looking at the map of 1930, the villagers lived alongside the River Stoke, and a main road with a bridge was built to connect the northern side of the river. In the western of the main road, few shops and a post office were established between houses, neighbor by a farmland. Another farmland was on the east side of the river. Large houses encompassed by gardens and a primary school could be seen in the west area as well.
Moving to the second map, in 2010, much scenery was turned into accommodations, including two farms and the shops. The grand villa and the primary school were expanded, while the former was converted its function to a retirement home.