Writing Feedback / People tend to enjoy interaction with their friends in social networking more than in the real life [4]

Hello
You have a good summary
I have some corrections for you

... negative impacts exist far outweigh than positive, although I do also (...) media on personal relation.
(i think it is better for you to add your notions in the introduction)

First of all, the elctronicelectronic media have advantage in the communication which we can use interesting (...) whatsapp application.whichItavailable in information devices and very easily.we useThe reason for this thatbecauseit onlythe feature provide to just touch the screen ...

(the sentence is too long to read, you can separate it into several parts for making readers can get your point)
... impact can become the negative impact to ...

... disadvantages in the relation, for the example, ...
thatIt give some comfortable (...) time when we use the tools.
alsoIn addition, it will create alteration in the individual life in the society.

In my conclusion, the information technology devices have more disadvantage ...(i think it is better you state again your notions after this sentence)
I suggest that the using of electronic media must be controlled and must remember the purpose to increasestay communication with other people in large range without ignore in ...

Overall, you give the explanation clear as you mention the benefit first and the drawback in the body II of paragraph

Thanks