Undergraduate / Motivational letter to Bocconi University [NEW]

Hi guys,

I am applying to BSc program at Bocconi University in Italty. Could you have a look at my motivational letter and suggest some ways I could improve it?

Thanks a lot!

Dear Admissions Committee,

My name is ... and I am a high school graduate from ... I am writing this letter to apply to the BSc International Economics and Management at Bocconi University. As I am looking for an international university that incorporates academic excellence and extracurricular diversity, Bocconi University arises as the school of my choice. With the highly intellectual yet dynamic environment at Bocconi University, I wish to acquire necessary knowledge and skills to manage my own non-profit- organization, PINK.

Challenges have always been my fascination. I love to place myself in unfamiliar situations and discover where my limits are. That is the reason why you may find I entered in several academic competitions and engaged myself in a variety of projects. Bocconi would be a perfect fit for me to continue challenging myself in different aspects. With a reputedly rigorous curriculum in line with the ever-changing society, my intellectual curiosity will undoubtedly be satisfied. In grade 10, I established a non-profit organization called PINK, providing educational opportunities to underprivileged children and offering workshops on necessary social skills in the 21st century to the youth. As stated, "Bocconi was founded on economic and social progress with a stress on strong ethics and values". I feel that Bocconi would enormously support my vision when I created PINK: to make a better society. Moreover, a global network of over 100000 alumni in assorted careers would offer me priceless advice on how to innovate PINK day after day.

Curious, versatile and ambitious are three adjectives to describe me. From an early age, I have always been eager to know more about the world and how things function. If I am interested in any field, regardless of how much time and effort has, I am committed to finding out the answer. Thanks to my relentless curiosity, I have had a great deal opportunities to take part in various kinds of extracurricular activities as stated in my CV, from fundraising, voluntary teaching to organizing event. In each experience, I applied the boring theory to practical situation and gained hands-on insight into how the professional world resembles in the future. These ranges of activities has well-equipped me for the vigorous milieu at Bocconi and simultaneously, drives me to change the world. The projects and workshops launched by PINK have enabled me to see that the future generation of Vietnam is in desperate need of an improved educational environment. Seeing their potential being wasted, their mindset disorientated, I am inclined to take action. With the qualifications from Bocconi University, I aim to expand PINK to a greater scale, turning it into a national foundation offering help for the youth in terms of academics and orientation. I believe that this is a feasible plan, as Bocconi "prepare us to change the world, not mold us to fit in it"

I am ascertained that my academic profile, extracurricular exposure and visions are a great match for Bocconi University. In return, Bocconi would bring out the unexplored side to me, encouraging me to reach what I have aspired to.

Undergraduate / "Veracity may count against you in this sophisticated society." Bryn Mawr College Supplement Essay. [3]

Hi, I intend to apply to Bryn Mawr College in RD. Can you have a look through my supplement essay? Thank you so much!

Topic: The Bryn Mawr Honor Code and Self-Government Association (SGA) affirm the importance of our academic and social communities. In your response please reflect on how you see the Honor Code and/or SGA shaping your experience at Bryn Mawr.

The Honor Code

"Veracity may count against you in this sophisticated society." I have heard many of my relatives saying this, and recounted the stories about the truthfulness being misunderstood on some papers recently. I have once feared whether maintaining the integrity would put me at the disadvantaged position when I myself witnessed cases of my friends cheating and achieving better grades than me. Fortunately my firm belief in the saying "A clean hand wants no washing" has enabled me to continue such laudable quality and adhere to the belief of a society where everybody connects and communicates on the ethics of trust. In the long run, I have not a clue whether this ideal society would come true. Yet in the next four years, I see this image in Bryn Mawr College where the Honor Code places integrity as the primary quality of all students. In this open yet closely-knit environment of sisterhood, I can see myself proudly use integrity as the guiding star for all my course of actions. Moreover, since I choose Economics as my career, Bryn Mawr will act as no better a place to practice the most essential requirement in this field.

Born into a Confucianism-stressed family, I am supposed to follow the predetermined set of rules. Girls like me are required to take care of the family, do housework and not to break out of the norm. My parents, despite wanting me to utilize what modern society has endowed upon me and being faithful in my ability to succeed, is more or less opposed to the image of undaunted, dynamic girl who would never cease to challenge social beliefs. However, last year I have made a decision that went against those regulations, by daring to move to HCMC alone despite rumors from acquaintances. At Bryn Mawr, the self-government association allows me to make more decisions that allow me to explore my maximum potential, to foster feminism in the safe belief that my sisters would be there, respect my choice and encourage my freedom to pave the way for intellectual and social growth. Here the advice I receive through communication and discussion will serve as a means to extend my boundaries, and as a stimulus to push me forward and prepare me for the unexpected. Additionally I will not only shape my college experience at Bryn Mawr but also give a helping hand in others' process of learning as well in that I am simultaneously responsible for my development and my peers', Bryn Mawr's advancement.