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Higher taxes should be collected from industries causing higher industrial pollution?


anhtho1412 1 / -  
Mar 23, 2018   #1
Some ppl argue that higher taxes should be collected from industries causing higher industrial pollution, whereas others argue that there are better ways to deal with it. Discuss both view and give opinion

higher taxes in exchange for bigger pollution



Environment has always been a crucial element to determine a healthy life of a person. Recent cases on the damage of industrial wastes, such as Formosa, have raised a wide flow of anger from the community. Tax-increasing for enterprises and corporations could be a solution. However, some people believe that other methods should be taken to save the habitat as well as to bind industries' responsibility. The essay agrees with the later, while discussing both perspectives.

On one hand, stipulating higher taxes for companies and industries' activities could bring about higher responsibility and liability. Any decisions to be made which have a possibility to influence negatively to the environment must be regarded to a sum of money that the industry has to incur. For example, a number of cigarettes consumers have reduced recently as a result of decreasing tobacco value added tax. Same evidences were shown in the index of people consuming soft drink. Therefore, new tax policy should be commenced in order to remind enterprises' owners' responsibility toward keeping the environment safe and clean.

However, on the other hand, I believe that other solutions are being considered to preserve the nature in industries' surrounding areas, such as reducing taxes on environment- friendly activities in particular time to give courage to entities to act more toward green cities. It is of utmost important that sustainable development requires all economic, social and environment sustainability. Concretely, strengthening national economy along with protecting and maintaining nature factors is a crucial point that any country targets, which was proven and brought into 2030 Agenda of the United States. Needless to say, the government should adjust national tax systems to encourage the investment and nurturing country's economy and to save the nature life at the same time.

In conclusion, this essay supports the idea that other actions can be done besides raising higher taxes for industries causing higher pollution, for instant, to put tax incentive for companies who run their business with environment care.
phuonguyenvt 2 / 3  
Mar 26, 2018   #2
Well-written essay. For instant-> For instance
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Mar 26, 2018   #3
Anh, your opening statement is not a paraphrase of the original prompt, this means a failing score in the Task Accuracy of the test. You were only supposed to restate the problem and deliver an explanation of the discussion instructions in the opening paraphrase. This is the section where your English comprehension skills are graded and sadly, you failed in this section miserably with your presentation. The proper presentation would have been as follows:

There is an ongoing debate as to whether industries that cause increased industrial pollution should be charged higher taxes. While some sectors support this suggestion, there are those who oppose it because they believe that there are alternative ways to deal with it. This essay will shed light on the discussion by presenting both points of view after which, my personal opinion regarding the topic will also be presented.

If you read through your essay, you will also see that you discussed only one point of view and they your personal opinion. Your personal opinion should not have taken the place of the second opinion discussion because your personal opinion is always meant, in this sort of discussion, to be the 3rd paragraph presentation in the body of paragraphs. So the format for the body paragraphs should be:

Body 1: 1st point of view
Body 2: send point of view
Body 3: Personal point of view
Conclusion

You will definitely lose major scoring points in the TA, C&C, and GRA sections of the essay because of your serious mistakes. You may not be able to garner a passing score with this sort of work.


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