aimuhire
Dec 21, 2016
Undergraduate / BEING CURIOUS EVEN MORE. I am requesting help on my common app personal statement [5]
@Holt
Thank you very much,
I am going to rewrite that essay.
@Holt
Thank you very much,
I am going to rewrite that essay.
aimuhire
Dec 21, 2016
Undergraduate / BEING CURIOUS EVEN MORE. I am requesting help on my common app personal statement [5]
thank you for the feedback,
would you suggest any rephrasing of this sentence?
I am going to rewrite the second paragraph!
thank you for the feedback,
"I had to survive without my family"
would you suggest any rephrasing of this sentence?
I am going to rewrite the second paragraph!
aimuhire
Dec 21, 2016
Undergraduate / BEING CURIOUS EVEN MORE. I am requesting help on my common app personal statement [5]
Most of us are born with an urge of knowing more; I was no different. In my childhood, I was very curious about the functioning of electronic devices, ranging from toys to remote controls. Although this passion led to the destruction of most devices earlier, it also increased my experience and knowledge throughout the years. By eleven, I could fix appliances with simple issues and was confident that there is no magic in how things work. In retrospect, that attitude of learning by experimentation cultivated a deep sense of curiosity that now defines who I am.
Though, that curiosity did not stop with electronic devices. After leaving elementary school for a boarding high school (one of the largest high school in Rwanda), I was pushed out of my comfort zone. I had to survive without my family, and I had to create new connections. This period of my life exposed me to new people, challenges and fears. I had to learn how to use my curiosity to figure out how this new world operated, and so I did. Being an avid reader inspired my writing skills and enabled me to become the leader of the high school's newspaper. As a leader and a writer for the newspaper, I published stories that were read by nearly fifteen hundred students. In addition, I challenged myself to enhance my interpersonal skills by being active in the non-violence high school club and by participating in debate contests. It didn't take very long until the high participation in my community earned me a co-host position at a local FM radio which allowed me to interact with an even bigger audience (the radio station was broadcasted in the southern province of Rwanda - more than two million people). All these experiences have shaped my personality and my character, and I always count on my strong curiosity to expand my horizons.
In my presence at a university, I do not plan to stop being curious but quite the opposite. I will interact with other students and learn about their experiences. Moreover, I will share about my country and Africa through my writing skills and debate skills that I developed as the leader of my high school's newspaper and a radio program co-host. In brief, I am confident that my unique background and sense of curiosity will allow me to be an asset to your university.
Being curious even more
Most of us are born with an urge of knowing more; I was no different. In my childhood, I was very curious about the functioning of electronic devices, ranging from toys to remote controls. Although this passion led to the destruction of most devices earlier, it also increased my experience and knowledge throughout the years. By eleven, I could fix appliances with simple issues and was confident that there is no magic in how things work. In retrospect, that attitude of learning by experimentation cultivated a deep sense of curiosity that now defines who I am.
Though, that curiosity did not stop with electronic devices. After leaving elementary school for a boarding high school (one of the largest high school in Rwanda), I was pushed out of my comfort zone. I had to survive without my family, and I had to create new connections. This period of my life exposed me to new people, challenges and fears. I had to learn how to use my curiosity to figure out how this new world operated, and so I did. Being an avid reader inspired my writing skills and enabled me to become the leader of the high school's newspaper. As a leader and a writer for the newspaper, I published stories that were read by nearly fifteen hundred students. In addition, I challenged myself to enhance my interpersonal skills by being active in the non-violence high school club and by participating in debate contests. It didn't take very long until the high participation in my community earned me a co-host position at a local FM radio which allowed me to interact with an even bigger audience (the radio station was broadcasted in the southern province of Rwanda - more than two million people). All these experiences have shaped my personality and my character, and I always count on my strong curiosity to expand my horizons.
In my presence at a university, I do not plan to stop being curious but quite the opposite. I will interact with other students and learn about their experiences. Moreover, I will share about my country and Africa through my writing skills and debate skills that I developed as the leader of my high school's newspaper and a radio program co-host. In brief, I am confident that my unique background and sense of curiosity will allow me to be an asset to your university.
