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Name: Kamaljot Kaur
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Dec 31, 2016
Undergraduate / A plethora of opportunities - NYU SUPPLEMENTAL ESSAY (WHY NYU?) [4]

NYU SUPPLEMENTAL ESSAY (WHY NYU?) Is it too straightforward??

Many opportunities to work towards career goal



Growing up in one of the most diverse cities in the world is something I am thankful for every single day. New York City has a reputation for a lot of great things; the huge skyscrapers, the magnificent skyline, and of course the delicious food. Certainly, one of the most important and influential institutes in this city is New York University. I strongly feel that NYU will be able to provide me with numerous educational opportunities outside of the city, and the vibrant atmosphere that the university creates will empower me to become a better student and a more versatile person.

The College of Arts and Sciences interested me from the very moment an NYU representative visited my high school and informed me about it. As I researched more about the college, I learned that one of the biggest highlights of the biology major offered at NYU is the research opportunities available. I am really interested in Evolutionary/Environmental Biology, and I became very delighted to read about the research options available to students via the Environmental Studies Program at NYU. I will be able to gain so much experience while doing research about the origins and evolution of certain genomes throughout this planet's history, which sounds absolutely boring, but is very interesting to learn about.

Although I aspire to become a physician someday, I am heavily interested in English literature. I want to major in English in college and hopefully I will be able to increase my knowledge about English literature and also learn how to become a better writer. The Liberal Studies Core program at NYU offers students the chance to travel abroad to study during their freshman year of college, and I think this opportunity is the perfect means to learn about different cultures and their literature and language. As an English major at NYU, I can take advantage of NYU's study away sites and travel to London, where I will be able to take courses that will teach me about British creative writing, politics, and history.

New York University can not only provide me with unparalleled social and academic resources located in New York City, but also allow me to travel to different countries to explore and experience diverse cultures. NYU offers its students a plethora of opportunities to work towards their career goal, and I would consider myself extremely lucky to study here.
kkaur199   
Dec 31, 2016
Undergraduate / Lafayette supplemental essay: I read so I can listen [4]

I think this essay is good overall, but the first and second paragraphs seem a little too similar, example wise. I would try to introduce something new in the second paragraph. Maybe try to tie in another idea or example that isn't going back to characters of books. Overall, I liked the way you tied in the whole theme of delving deep into books and how you connect to them. Just try to make a few changes within your paragraphs and you should be good.
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