davkang
Jan 14, 2017
Undergraduate / Mini-essay for my UBC application's personal profile. Problem and/or an unfamiliar situation. [6]
@Holt
It is very reassuring to hear that from you!
I have moved the sentence "Since then I have been doing all my travel documents myself as well as my families'." to the end of the first paragraph and redrafted the rest, here's the newer version of 2nd paragraph as follows:
"From this experience I learned a universal lesson that the lack of caution can give rise to repercussion; careful planning while isn't for the lazy, saves time for unnecessary trouble and makes it easier to find a head start when dealing with unfamiliar tasks. "
While it is still short, it is without the former sentence, and completely focuses on what I've learned from the experience. Plus I was unable to expand it any further due to the word limit. After cutting off lots of pieces from the first paragraph, the whole essay is still breaking the limit by 8 words. Could you please provide me any advice on that?
@Holt
It is very reassuring to hear that from you!
I have moved the sentence "Since then I have been doing all my travel documents myself as well as my families'." to the end of the first paragraph and redrafted the rest, here's the newer version of 2nd paragraph as follows:
"From this experience I learned a universal lesson that the lack of caution can give rise to repercussion; careful planning while isn't for the lazy, saves time for unnecessary trouble and makes it easier to find a head start when dealing with unfamiliar tasks. "
While it is still short, it is without the former sentence, and completely focuses on what I've learned from the experience. Plus I was unable to expand it any further due to the word limit. After cutting off lots of pieces from the first paragraph, the whole essay is still breaking the limit by 8 words. Could you please provide me any advice on that?
