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Posts by Doel Hasan
Name: Mehedi Ibne Hasan
Joined: Feb 1, 2017
Last Post: Mar 29, 2017
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From: Bangladesh
School: South Point School and College

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Doel Hasan   
Mar 29, 2017
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: environmental topic, fossil fuels / other forms of energy [6]

For help use these websites :
1. ieltsmaterial (Writing task 1 and 2 samples are really good)
2. ielts-mentor (Good for speaking samples)
Use these websites to read high band score samples and learn from them.
Practice and practice. By the the way I got 7.5 in IELTS and currently trying to get study visa for Canada. Wish me luck and pray for me.
Doel Hasan   
Mar 29, 2017
Undergraduate / College Choice - quality and necessary improvements of my study permit essay for Canada [4]

First of all thank you Holt and frenchfries for your advice.

I understand your concerns Holt that i am under undermining my country, but you have to understand is that the things I said that my country lacks are true. My country has little to no education on 3d computer graphics. I researched extensively. And if their was I would not want to leave my country in the first place. It is my dream to create these digital entertainment and my country has been developing the job market with necessary tools and software on this field for a few years. Most of all I want to establish my skills and ability on my country rather than improve the technology that my country already has. I am an artist and I want to use the existing software and tools to create art and entertainment. Not modify the technology as I don't want to be an engineer. Studying abroad is the only way to achieve my goal. Please help me improve my essay.

P.S. My country is Bangladesh. I am 16+ years old. I have competed my O level with A grade on 5 subjects and A* on 3 subjects.

P.S. My agent has already collected and formatted all my financial prove documents to show my payment plans. Do I need to mention it again in the essay ?
Doel Hasan   
Mar 28, 2017
Undergraduate / College Choice - quality and necessary improvements of my study permit essay for Canada [4]

My College Choice



Since the age of 14 I have fostered an affinity towards 3d motion pictures along with interactive software like 3d video games and the professional content creation software used to create these entertainment mediums. As a result, I have conducted extensive research about my interests in order to find the possible career prospects I can attain in future when I grow up. Consequently, I finally concluded that I would become a 3d content creator and animator when it is time for me to choose a career. I have been using such animation software as a hobby ever since I had this mind set. It gives me great joy to create various 3d animation projects using these software and provides me with knowledge and experience which I can easily transfer to my profession later in life.

Considering all these factors, I took the initiative to plan and investigate the kind of education I had to receive which would enable me to convert my hobby into an occupation. I did this because I believe having proper education is the most vital component contributing to a person's success, whether it be in their career or any other social and professional activity in life. So I planned to study and work hard to get good grades which will allow me to an admission in a prominent college or university in my country and study computer graphics on the 3d animation department. But the dilemma with my plan is, as I later found out, that though their is extensive establishments of computer technology in the educational and commercial sectors in my country, their is still insignificant involvement of the education department in teaching the usage of 3d computer graphics to produce digital contents for the entertainment and digital communication mediums (such as television shows, advertisements etc) in my country. This is unfortunate as this is my primary field of study for becoming a 3d animator and graphics designer. But whats interesting is that many established national film studios, graphics production and mass media companies has noticed this lack of quality on their products and has taken steps to try to alleviate this problem for a few years now. They have hired foreign workers and teachers to train and educate the workforce about the new and improved tools and techniques. Also many computer engineers have been sent abroad to study in the field of advanced 3d animation and graphics design, so that in future after their return they would heighten the quality and integrity of our entertainment and media industry to an international standard. As a result, gradually the career opportunities on this field is increasing and becoming more lucrative. But currently there is very little formal education such as college diploma and university degrees on this subjects in my country. For these reasons, I have searched for an suitable institute in a foreign country to do my further studies on 3d animation and graphics design after finishing my O' level examinations.

So after many searches of my own and various suggestions from my teachers, my friends and relatives (some who are residing abroad), I decided that I would study in Canada. There are many good reasons for choosing Canada but there are few important ones that I would like to specifically mention. Firstly, Canada is a developed country (unlike my country which is still considered a developing country) with substantial advancements in the field of education and technology. As a result, Canada has some of the most finest colleges and universities providing reliable and top-notch education and their education quality is recognized internationally. So I believe studying in Canadian institute will ensure I get the best possible education on my subject and will allow me to achieve my dream of becoming a properly trained 3d animation artist and be able to take advantage of the growing industry on this particular field by applying for good jobs in my country. Another compelling reason is that, Canada's population consists of people from various countries, cultures and believes compared to my country (which has a population of mostly bengali people). This will give me a great opportunity to meet and interact with people from all over the world. This experience will give me valuble insight and knowledge about the lives, habits and behaviors of these people with different tradition from my own, which will make me a more sociable person and teach me how to communicate better with various kind of people within my community.

As for my choice of college, I have chosen Mohawk College as it has all the above qualities that I have mentioned above as my reasons for visiting Canada for further education. Mohawk college's Animation 3D course which is an Ontario College Advanced Diploma is a very suitable program for me. It will teach me all the fundamentals of design softwares required to do basic to intermediate 3d animation tasks at first and throughout the duration of the program, teach me various advanced methods of using the software for 3d content creation. Aside from three dimensional art, the program will also teach me traditional 2d drawing for creating advanced story-boarding (this is a process of drawing things on paper for planning and prototyping ideas before doing 3d projects on computer). Moreover, the program also includes topics on business strategies for computer graphics artists which teaches how make sustainable income and find suitable jobs effectively.
Doel Hasan   
Feb 1, 2017
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1. Six pie charts about water usage worldwide [4]

Hello mariana, I have taken the liberty to edit the whole essay for you. Here is your essay :

The charts illustrates the data regarding the water usage for three different purposes ...

Firstly, the developing areas such as South America, Africa, Central and South East Asia have the largest consumption of water for agricultural use. This accounts for about four fifth of the total usage for these localities with Central Asia having the highest percentage of 88%. Europe and North America, however, have much less usage at 32% and 39% respectively.

On the other hand, the usage of water for industries is most significant in developed areas like North America at 48% and Europe having the greatest amount of 53%. In contrast, this percentage is extremely low from 12% to 5% usage for the other developing areas.

When it comes to the domestic category, compared to the other two usages of water, there is tenfold drop in the percentage to 7% for Central and South East Asia, 9% for Africa and 13% to 19% for the three other locations.

Some advice I would give to you is that :
1. You should mention the actual numbers and percentages from the charts.
2. No need to write personal opinions like (developed or developing areas).
3. Learn to use more synonyms.
4. It is not necessary to give a conclusion.
What matters is the details and comparisons of the figures in the charts.

For more help use these websites :
1. ielts material (Good for writing task 1 and 2 samples)
2. ielts-mentor (Good for speaking samples)
Use these websites to read high band score samples and learn from them.
Practice and practice. By the the way I got 7.5 in IELTS and currently trying to get study visa for Canada. Wish me luck and pray for me.
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