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Name: Firman Ikhsan
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firmanikhsan   
Feb 12, 2017
Scholarship / Objective Study Essay for AMINEF Fulbrigt Scholarship, Master in Industrial Design [13]

Another superb review from you @Holt, thank you very much.

This is the revision for paragraph 2

Studying Industrial Design in United States is mandatory to accomplish my future goals. According to Start College, U.S.A has top ranked Master's programs in the field of design. The learning approach is emphasized on critical thinking and open-mindedness. I will be able to grasp advanced theories and technologies through sophisticated laboratories and studios in University. With your vast resources of finest quality designers, will enrich my study insight and experience. There are also plenty of internship opportunities to forge my skills and abilities. Furthermore, I will heavily engage in international events like Red Dot Award and IDSA Conference to prepare me to become a professional industrial designer.
firmanikhsan   
Feb 10, 2017
Scholarship / Objective Study Essay for AMINEF Fulbrigt Scholarship, Master in Industrial Design [13]

Thank you @Holt. It is nice tho have input from different point of view.

As written in the AMINEF application form, about the second paragraph, the prompt said Give your reason for wanting to pursue them in the U.S.

The additional information I found in AMINEF website ( I am sorry for not including beforehand) is don't give a particular college or university, because AMINEF will submit this essay to several universities at once

So the reason I write, must be regarding U.S in general. Do you have any suggestions about this part? :)
firmanikhsan   
Feb 10, 2017
Scholarship / Objective Study Essay for AMINEF Fulbrigt Scholarship, Master in Industrial Design [13]

Thank you @ichanpants89 for the incredible feedback. I have revised the opening and essay arrangement.

Study Objective

Although industrial development masterplan already established in 2005, local goods still not suficient enough to fulfill national demand, said Indonesia's Minister of Trade, Gita Wirjawan. Enrolling in a postgraduate program, particularly in Industrial Design, encourages me to be a designer who have expertise to conceive products that answer the consumer's needs. I am highly enthusiastic about learning on product design, human centered design, and manufacturing process. Exploring this field will empower me to gain proficiency for combining science, arts and technology to create immense products that can improve people's life experience.

Studying Industrial Design in United States is mandatory to accomplish my future goals. According to Start College, U.S.A is a top ranked country in the field of design. I will be able to grasp advanced theories and technologies supported by sophisticated laboratories and studios in University. With your vast resources of top quality designer from various backgrounds and cultures, it will enrich my study experience and outcome. I can also contribute to this area by sharing my ideas and experience in design practices. Furthermore, I will heavily engage in international event like Red Dot Award and IDSA Conference to prepare me to become a professional in industrial design.

During my Master's degree, I plan to conduct research about Design Problems and Processes. Within this domain, I want to concentrate in design parameters and manufacturing technology, as well as humanity factor such as emotional and aesthetic side of product design. During my professional work, I received myriad of project design offers from prospective clients, especially from governmental institution that wanted to realize their notion into a physical form or system. However, I had to turned it down because with my limited knowledge in product design, I can only implemented my comprehension from mechanical and engineering side. This study will equip me with critical and creative thinking to compare and test methods, and to seek discoveries through the analysis and synthesis of cross-disciplinary approaches and the application of design thinking.

This program is strongly related to my previous education. I graduated with honor from University of Indonesia, majoring in Mechanical Engineering. During my Bachelor's study, I learned about mechanical design principles and material engineering that provided me with knowledge required for design practices. Outside the campus, I have completed some projects on product design that enhance my skill and awareness. Currently, I am working in Robotics Laboratory at Surya University as Mechanical Designer. This profession causing me to actively involved in research on mechanical product design and development. My main task is developing a concept for a product or a system, based on client's requirements. Our clients stretched from start-up business to national military institution. Recently, a wearable robot that I constructed, was published by national television as the first ever made in Indonesia. So it is clear that my background is well aligned with my future study.

After graduate, my goal is to be a professional in industrial design in Indonesia. Together with other fellow designers in local communities like ADPI (Indonesian Product Design Alliance) and PDF ( Product Design Focus), I want to grow the innovative and conceptual design practices. In my country, local products are being outcompeted by imported ones because the concept did not well modeled. Lack of innovation is a major problem that causing the monotonous style and plagiarism. Inadequacy of production understanding is another factor that makes them more expensive compared to imported products.

I would like to build a collaboration between governments, local designers and industrial manufacturers. With a vigorous connection between them, they can share design ideas and challenges, and realize it into with appropriate production tools. Their design will be more feasible to fabricate, even with local materials available. With my connection to several government institutions and fabrication sites, I believe this will works like a charm. I also intend to actively participate in product design event like Black Innovation Award and some design conferences to expand my networking.

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For other reviewers, please feel free to give your advice and suggestion

Thank you :)
firmanikhsan   
Feb 10, 2017
Scholarship / Objective Study Essay for AMINEF Fulbrigt Scholarship, Master in Industrial Design [13]

Thank you @Holt for your input regarding the essay requirement. I have edited and presented it in the essay below

Study Objective

I want to enroll a Master's program in Design field, focusing on Industrial Design. I am very enthusiastic about learning and conducting research on product design, human centered design, and manufacturing process. My goal is to be a designer which can transform an idea dedicated to solve a problem occurred in our life, into a real product. Studying this field will empower me to gain proficiency for combining science, arts and technology to create immense products that can improve people's life experience.

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For other reviewers, please feel free to give your advice and suggestion

Thank you :)
firmanikhsan   
Feb 7, 2017
Scholarship / Objective Study Essay for AMINEF Fulbrigt Scholarship, Master in Industrial Design [13]

Thank you @Riyan Mudastsir and @Holt for your feedback. I have revised the essay and I hope this new one does not contain any mistake you have mentioned above.

For other reviewers, please feel free to give your advice and suggestion

Thank you :)

Study Objective

I want to enroll a Master's program in Engineering, focusing on Industrial Design. I am very enthusiastic about learning and conducting research on product design, human centered design, and manufacturing process. My goal is to be a designer which can transform an idea to solve a problem occurred in our life, into a real product. Studying this field will empower me to gain proficiency for combining science, arts and technology to create immense products that can improve people's life experience.

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firmanikhsan   
Feb 7, 2017
Scholarship / Objective Study Essay for AMINEF Fulbrigt Scholarship, Master in Industrial Design [13]

Dear Essay Experts

This is my Objective Study Essay for scholarship application.

The tasks are:
1. A clear and detailed description of your study objectives.
2. Give your reason for wanting to pursue them in the U.S.
3. Describe the kind of program you expect to undertake
4. Explain how your proposed field of study fits in with your educational background, your professional background, your future objectives, and your future involvement in community development.


I need your excellent review
Thanks in advance :)

Study Objective - my path



Our everyday life, started from waking up until ready to go to the bed again, always exposed to products resulted from industrial design practices. Ranging from a tooth brush to a jet plane, those are essential to solve our problems and make our life easier. That's why I am interested for a Master's program in Engineering, focusing on Industrial Design field. I am fascinated in learning and conducting research in product design, human centered design, and manufacturing process. Studying this area will enable me to gain proficiency for combining science, arts and technology to create immense products that can improve people's life experience.

This program is strongly related to my previous education. I graduated with honor from University of Indonesia, majoring in Mechanical Engineering. During my Bachelor's study, I learned about mechanical design principles and material engineering that provided me the knowledge required for design practices. Moreover, outside the campus, I have completed some projects on product design. My work and organization are causing me to actively involved in research on mechanical product design and development. Currently, I worked at Robotics Laboratory in Surya University as Mechanical Designer. My task mainly focused on developing a concept for a products or a system, based on client's requirement. My clients are stretched from start-up business to national military institution. Recently, a wearable robot that I designed is published by national television as the first ever made in Indonesia. So it is clear that my background is well aligned with my future study.

In the Master's Program, I plan to conduct research about Design Problems and Processes. Within this domain, I want to concentrate in design parameters and manufacturing technology, as well as humanity side such as emotional and aesthetic factor of product design. During my professional work, I received myriad of project design offers from prospective clients, especially from governmental institution to realize their idea into a working products or system. However, I have to turned it down because with my limited knowledge in product design, I can only implementing my comprehension from mechanical and engineering side. This study will equipped me with critical and creative thinking to compare and test methods, and to seek discoveries through the analysis and synthesis of cross-disciplinary approaches and the application of design thinking.

After graduate, my goal is to be a professional in industrial design, developing an Industrial Design Center institution in Indonesia, that growing the innovative and conceptual design practices. In my country, local products are being outmarketed by the imported ones because the concept did not well designed. Lack of innovation is a major problem that causing the monotonous style and plagiarism. Inadequacy of production awareness is another factor that made them more expensive compared to imported products. I would like to be build a collaboration between governments, local designers dan industrial manufacturers. With a vigorous connection between them, they can share design ideas and challenges, and realize it into marketable products. The design will be more feasible to produced, even with local materials available. I also intend to actively participated in product design event like Black Innovation Award and other design conferences to expand my networking.

Studying Industrial Design in United States is necessary to accomplish my future goals. America is a top ranked country in the field of design. I will be able to explore advanced theories and technologies supported by sophisticated laboratories and studios in University. With your vast resources of top quality designer from various backgrounds and cultures, it will enrich my study experience and outcome. Furthermore, I can heavily participate in international event like Red Dot Award and TED conferences to prepared me to become a professional in Industrial Design.
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