Writing Feedback / Does the punishment required in order to educate a children? [4]

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Question :
It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.

To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

Answer :

only soft punishment is suitable for children

Some people think that through a punishment, children can realize what they must do; know whether is right and wrong. Unfortunately, it can harm and furthermore damage their mental or body. Those who disagree point out that in terms of educating the children we must give a good & moral approach rather that give a punishment. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss how to educate a children without treated a punishment and kind of punishment that appropriate for a children.

To help children understand whether is right and wrong as a parents we must pay attention and give a guidance through their activity. For example, children who watched television don't know which program is suitable for their age. We can decided a program that appropriate like cartoon or educational games supported with parental guidance to support their growth.

Another way we must do to educate an offspring instead of giving a punishment is through our habit. Children will differed and copied our habit as they saw it. For example, if we entering a room we always give a greeting for a whole family including the children. In the following moments, the children will practiced a same things and it can influence their behavior. Then they will realize which one is good and bad. Despite treating a punishment we got another choice to educate a children through a guidance, advice and providing a good example. It can accelerated their understand to do a right things.

Nevertheless, punishment allowed only for a children who argued and break their limit or make a multiple mistakes. Even the punishment allowed, doesn't mean that we can do a harsh punishment. In terms of educating a children, a soft punishment is recommended rather than harsh punishment. Soft punishment only focusing to treat their habit and give an understand through a strict way. For example, if an offspring spend a whole day on their gadget and forgetting their responsibility, we can put away a gadget on a week day and allowed it on a week end. Suported with advice and positive activity. And harsh punishment can damaged their mental and body and affected their growth.

To conclude with, in order to educate an offspring as a parent we can provide a whole attention and give a guidance through their activity. Punishment is allowed if they argued & make a mistake and only soft punishment is suitable for this age.

Scholarship / Scholarship Essay about how important the punishment is itself for educated a children. [3]

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this caption?
What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use of teach good behavior to children.

education and learning with the use of punishment

Nowadays, a gadget can accessable through a wide range of ages. Especially for the offsprings. Unfortunately, many children engaged with their gadget all day and forgot their responsibility at school and ignore anything. Others, might think to allowed their kids to play with a gadget instead of banned it. It could damage their behavior. In the following paragraph, I will elaborated how important the punishment is to this case and kind of punishment that must treated.

Punishment is aimed to educated the children's habits with different approach by providing some rules. There are many kind of punishment that can be adapted. But we concern on moral/logical punishment instead of physical/harsh punishment. For a children who earned their day with gadget and forgot their responsibility, parents must took their gadget during a week day and provide it in a week end. We must limited their hours with gadget. Play with gadget might harm their study furthermore decreased their performances at school.

Moral/Logical punishment allowed a kids to know and understand which is right and wrong by providing some advice and surrounded their life with a good activity. Despite providing acces to a gadget, we must strict a rule on it so they know their limit. Inspite of having a chance to conduct a punishment, we got another way to educates our son. It is not necessary to punished our children, however. As a parents, we can prevent any bad things that can influence our children by spending more time with them, take a short tour to educational place, put a control on their activity and also limit the access to their gadget. All of this things can accelerated and enhance their ability to understand which is right and not and influence their behavior. Parents have a big role in this part. Parents must give a good example and strict a rule on it.

To conclude with, punishment is needed in order to educated the children into a good behavior. One kind of punishment that can adapted is moral/logical punishment. We can also prevent the punishment by putting control on their activity and spending more time with them.