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tramnguyen123456

Feb 25, 2017

Writing Feedback / The tendency that youth graduates find it difficult to find a job nowadays [8]

@Holt
Thank you. Your oppinions are very clear and useful, so I can learn from experience for writing other essays. Thank you so much, HOLT. However, I do not understand how to write solution clearly, I do know whether the solutions can be mine if I can give good reasons for it.

tramnguyen123456

Feb 23, 2017

Writing Feedback / The tendency that youth graduates find it difficult to find a job nowadays [8]

Thank you for commending on my thread, and I am also sorry that i did not post full promt. Actually, the topic of this essay is "in many countries, more and more young people are unable to find jobs after graduation. What problems do you think youth unemployment will cause to the individual and society? What can be done to cope with this problem?"

the minimum words are 250. I think that i need to rewrite that essay. Thank you so much for your help.

tramnguyen123456

Feb 20, 2017

Writing Feedback / The tendency that youth graduates find it difficult to find a job nowadays [8]

In many countries, more and more young people are unable to find jobs after graduation.

unemployed graduates

With the tendency that youth graduates find it difficult to find a job nowadays, youth unemployment is becoming a big issue in many countries in the world. This essay will point out some negative consequences as well as give some possible solution to remedy it.

to begin with, the obvious affect is that jobless people cannot find the way to earn for living, thus they are incapable of supporting themselves and their family as well as covering the loans which they might have for education at university or college, (which really creates) creating a big pressure not only on them but also on their family financially and psychologically. Therefore, they may be haunted by depress and negative.

However, it is far from private problems, it is actually a problem of entire society when the rate of social instability increases, and people with resentment and disappointment can much more easily form gangs or groups which can commit robbery, stole, pick-pocket or other more serious crimes.

The solution should be discussed at both personal and government scales. It is high time that government allowance for the unemployed should be made policy in order to maintain social instability as well as give them a chance to have a better life. Besides, some people content that having a further education can give unemployed people more advantages. However, in my opinion, I do not totally agree with this idea, because it seems to delay the problem rather than solve it. A more crucial thing is that the young with unemployment should be taken into the consideration; they should lower their expectation or can accept the seemingly more fundamental works, maybe in their community or rural area. With the solutions mentioned above, I believe that the situation can be diminished.

(can you help me to correct mistakes in this essay? Thank you very much)