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Name: Hafiz Fatah
Joined: Mar 7, 2017
Last Post: Mar 9, 2017
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From: Indonesia
School: UniversitasGadjah Mada

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hafizfatah   
Mar 7, 2017
Scholarship / A LITTLE GIRL WITH A BIG DREAM - Self of Introduction, KGSP 2017 [5]

Hi elizabethnovi, I have evaluated your essay and it seems that you need to work on your grammar. I am also an Indonesian and I understand that many people often says grammar is not really important. But It is very important, do not actually need huge effort to learn the basics, and it will help us a lot in expressing sentences properly.

And I think you may improve your essay by putting more information about what you want to be or what professional career you want in the future.

Cheers, Goodluck for the KGSP!
hafizfatah   
Mar 7, 2017
Scholarship / A LITTLE GIRL WITH A BIG DREAM - Self of Introduction, KGSP 2017 [5]

I have born grew up with two brothers...
It makes me thinking so rationally,(...), I found my mother is so independent ...

On my 2nd second year of college, I'm being became the leader for of Assemblage of Architecture Student's (...) opportunity for a woman.
... ambitions and become a person who wants ...
Sometimes, it grows to can evolve to be my weakness. But not just that Additionally, I'm I am (use unshorted writing in a formal text) addicted ...

Being a leader makes me learn how to make the best options, not the perfect (...) other alternatives.
..., rather than being disappointed if there is no one (...) best option with less negative thoughts. In the same year, I use to joined for redaction ...

... I start from being a reporter, editor and the final is eventually being a setter ...
Become a reporter lead (...), growing developing my communication skill with people from all ages and professions.

... realistic analysis than a feeling.
... materials that affect to the building ...

From 7th semester I have been taking a part as an assistant lecturer, ...
I have ever joined a community ...

supervisor always told us that we must [...] exist are create sustainable system.
this is a confusing sentence, I dont really understand what you are trying to say.

... study in Korea is not far from related to ...
... Leadership Center who which is based in Seoul.
..., two years too (?) I have searched information ...
... not only that (Additionally), the chance I visit Korea on 2016 made me sure I must to learn there a chance of visiting ...
hafizfatah   
Mar 7, 2017
Graduate / Motivation Letter in Geo-information for Natural Hazards, Risk, and Engineering Master Degree [4]

Dear Everyone,

I am writing a short motivation letter with maximum 500 words to apply for a university admission in University of Twente. The letter should state what problem I concern with, why I select the program, and how it can help achieving my goals in the future.

And below is my draft of essay. I need advice or correction for improvement of my draft. Thank you very much.

University of Twente application



Motivation Letter:

Hundreds million people in Indonesia are living in disaster-prone areas, exposed to various kinds of natural disasters. This is a country where we need to live in harmony along with hundreds active volcanoes, earthquakes with more than one per day frequency -some of them may trigger tsunamis-, floods, and landslides everywhere. Yet, Indonesia is lacking of disaster awareness in regional planning.

However, Indonesia is getting better and there has been an array of efforts in reducing disaster risks in recent years including several steps of risk assessment, spatial planning, structural preparedness of buildings, and community awareness due to simultaneous major disasters happened during 2000s. But still, there is a lack of resources in conducting a good geospatial analysis due to the vast area Indonesia has, especially in regional level. To address this issue and be a part of those who thrive to transform Indonesia to be a resilient nation toward disasters encouraged me to pursue higher education in Geo-information Science & Earth Observation for Applied Earth Sciences, with specialization in Natural Hazards, Risk, and Engineer.

Studying Geological Engineering and taking all of natural hazard related courses during my undergraduate program give a strong basic knowledge which is useful in risks assessments. However, having involved in a project of installing landslides and flash flood early warning system conducted by UGM and National Board for Disaster Management in Papua Island and attended several forums discussing disasters risk reduction open up my awareness that it is vital to be able to provides geospatial information accurately for government to enhance the planning policy and for community to improve preparedness. To link up my previous study to practical uses in disaster management by achieving both of understanding and technical skills on evaluating hazard by societal and engineering perspective is the main reason I am keen on joining the course. I am looking forward with great enthusiasm to have an opportunity of learning the "empirical modelling of hazard processes" and "process modelling of natural hazard" modules.

There are rising needs in Indonesia of geospatial analyst as it is an emerging expertise recently recognized its importance by the most of regional governments. Being able to contribute in a government institution reducing disaster risk would be my main purpose in the future and education from the ITC is going to be valuable in facing continuous challenges in hazard management.

I stand strongly that your university offers the perfect blend of courses so that it could be a rigid foundation on which the zenith of my career may lie. With a burning desire to learn more and venture ahead in my favourite field, I apply for the mentioned graduate program that may ultimately stretch my passion of becoming a Disaster Analyst.
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