septyndid
Mar 27, 2017
Writing Feedback / People house change - the village of Stokeford in 1930 [3]
@tamtamii
Introduction:
*In the first sentence,
The maps illustrate Stokeford area -> you can writethe specific condition of Stokeford area such as changes or alteration.
*... both of two years = 4 years -> ... both of years.
BP 1:
*use the suitable preposition
... west sidefrom road ... -> ... west side of road ...
*... Stakeford canbought -> ... can buy ( modal + infinitive)
*Thereare also similarity ... -> There was also similarity ...
BP 2:
*... the eastern part ... -> Part of what?
*Therewere also primary school -> There was also primary school (use "to be" in appropriate way)
*... this experiencedexpanse ... -> ... this experienced expansion ...
Overall, you should more pay attention about the use of suitable "to be".
@tamtamii
Introduction:
*In the first sentence,
The maps illustrate Stokeford area -> you can writethe specific condition of Stokeford area such as changes or alteration.
*... both of two years = 4 years -> ... both of years.
BP 1:
*use the suitable preposition
... west side
*... Stakeford can
*There
BP 2:
*... the eastern part ... -> Part of what?
*There
*... this experienced
Overall, you should more pay attention about the use of suitable "to be".