Undergraduate / RISD SHORT ESSAY [16]

Hi, I am so new

Anyway I read your essay. It's okay maybe your real experience could help. In this case, your essay sound surrealistic
I couldn't feel any moment that you really appreciate in art around you. Even the gallery you went.

I dont know any of grammar but for this essay, try to make it real. Try to walk along the street and you will see other thins than rock,water splash or boat.

You are not apply for literature, you are applying for ART so.

I believe you can make it wonderful.