hasanah_13
Apr 25, 2017
Writing Feedback / Expenditure of five countries by category [2]
GRAMMAR
what isthe biggest proportion of ... -------------------- use past tense because the year is 2002
firstly, all people in those countriesspendtheir fund on ... ----------------- use past tens [spent]
Furthermore, the second highest [ was ] occupied by ... ----------- add was there
Turning to the second category is clothing and footwear ... --------- past tense [was]
the rest three countries spend almost similar on ... ---------------------- past tense spent
Maybe you can reduce using too much number presenting the percentage and replace it with word such as 32,14% ----- just over a third and etc
thanks
GRAMMAR
what isthe biggest proportion of ... -------------------- use past tense because the year is 2002
firstly, all people in those countriesspendtheir fund on ... ----------------- use past tens [spent]
Furthermore, the second highest [ was ] occupied by ... ----------- add was there
Turning to the second category is clothing and footwear ... --------- past tense [was]
the rest three countries spend almost similar on ... ---------------------- past tense spent
Maybe you can reduce using too much number presenting the percentage and replace it with word such as 32,14% ----- just over a third and etc
thanks