Posts by Dora Elia Kasih
Name: Dora Elia Kasih
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Last Post: May 11, 2017
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From: Indonesia
School: University of Bengkulu
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Dora Elia Kasih May 11, 2017
Writing Feedback /
Progress Report English Course [6]
please attention your grammar and punctation, because there are some mistakes in your sentences. so, try to use complex sentences and passive voice in each paragraph. thanks..
Dora Elia Kasih May 11, 2017
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Various cases of people living abroad [4]
The chart shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countrieslife outside the homeland
The bar chart reveals about cases of people have when they migrate to live in other countries. Overall, sorting out healthcare which people aged between 35 to 54 face became the highest problem meanwhile elderly people experienced the lowest problem on finding school for my children.
To begin with, sorting out healthcare of people aged 35-54 remotesa significant increase at approximately 36 percent. Additionally, people aged 18-34 encounters 30% of problem on sorting out finance. Furthermore, both of theseare the greatest problems. On the other hand, finding school for my children is the lowest problem for people aged over 55 or elderly people at approximately 20% and saw an extreme decrease in nearly 3 per cent.
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