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May 25, 2017
Writing Feedback / Who should integrate children into public life? [3]
hello. thank you for your feedback :). i don't know why but the topic up there is not my topic. it's just the general one. mine is: "Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. " So, in my opinion, I go for the importance of BOTH school and parent. I was not choosing any of those. That's why I analysed both sides and came to the conclusion that both are important and missing one of 2 will cause negative impact on the development of a child. And can you point out what is wrong with my grammar and sentence structure so that I can easily fix it? Thank you so much.@Frank86
hello. thank you for your feedback :). i don't know why but the topic up there is not my topic. it's just the general one. mine is: "Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. " So, in my opinion, I go for the importance of BOTH school and parent. I was not choosing any of those. That's why I analysed both sides and came to the conclusion that both are important and missing one of 2 will cause negative impact on the development of a child. And can you point out what is wrong with my grammar and sentence structure so that I can easily fix it? Thank you so much.@Frank86