nguyentram
Jul 21, 2017
Writing Feedback / "A lot of people want to get married at later ages. Why is this trend popular ?" [5]
@Holt
I really appreciate for your comments. This was the first essay I have written so I do not know the right way to connect two questions in the original instructions. You mean that I have to write the first paragraph with the topic sentence "getting married is a barrier to career achievements" and try to discuss it by using a strong supporting statement. Similarly, the second paragraph will be used to talk about positive aspects of this trend. But How many good sides should I mention to ?
@akbarmappiare
May you show me the mistakes I made in the meaning and grammar and give me some synonyms to paraphrase the statements used in the introductory paragraph, please ?
@Holt
I really appreciate for your comments. This was the first essay I have written so I do not know the right way to connect two questions in the original instructions. You mean that I have to write the first paragraph with the topic sentence "getting married is a barrier to career achievements" and try to discuss it by using a strong supporting statement. Similarly, the second paragraph will be used to talk about positive aspects of this trend. But How many good sides should I mention to ?
@akbarmappiare
May you show me the mistakes I made in the meaning and grammar and give me some synonyms to paraphrase the statements used in the introductory paragraph, please ?