Writing Feedback / Public health improvement by increasing the number of sports facilities.IELTS task2-cambridge8-test3 [5]

Topic: Some people say that the best way to improve health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required

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Nowadays, public health improvement has recently become a great concern all around the world. While some argue that an increase in the number of sports facilities is the best way, I believe that there are other measures which have more impact on the improvement of public health.

On the one hand, it is undeniable that increasing sports facilities is essential for the public health because playing sports is the best as well as the easiest way to improve our health. However, the majority of people do not have enough free time to travel a long distance to the sports center although they are actually keen on playing sports. A survey of Youth newspaper reveals that near 30% residents in Ho Chi Minh city do not play sport because the sports centers are too far from their houses. As a result, the higher number of sports facilities will probably increase the rate of people doing exercise. This can lead to the improvement of public health.

On the other hand, there are other measures which have a better effect on our health. While increasing sports facilities require an enormous amount of money, there are many cheaper ways. For example, providing more sports equipment in the local parks also encourages people to exercise while reducing the cost. Moreover, besides physical activities, having a healthy diet is also crucial. Educating people about the harmful effect of fast food, smoking and alcohol by using multi-media is actually one of the best ways to improve personal health and the public health in general.

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