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Aug 20, 2017
Writing Feedback / Ad vs disad of a young population - IELTS task 2 essay [3]
@Holt
I'm truly thankful for your remark.
Regarding your advice on opening and concluding statements, I was following some tips from ielts-simon (such as ielts-simon./ielts-help-and-english-pr/2017/06/ielts-writing-task-2-homework-essay.html) . Now I got frustrated whether I must change this brief way of writing for the less important parts in the essay.
Concerning incomparable aspects of the 2 views, I do totally agree with you that it would be better if I could contradict each of 2 body paragraphs to the other.
Last but not least, please give me your overview opinions on the vocab usage as I'm not a native speaker and I'm focusing on improving my writing's naturalness.
Thanks,
Vinh
@Holt
I'm truly thankful for your remark.
Regarding your advice on opening and concluding statements, I was following some tips from ielts-simon (such as ielts-simon./ielts-help-and-english-pr/2017/06/ielts-writing-task-2-homework-essay.html) . Now I got frustrated whether I must change this brief way of writing for the less important parts in the essay.
Concerning incomparable aspects of the 2 views, I do totally agree with you that it would be better if I could contradict each of 2 body paragraphs to the other.
Last but not least, please give me your overview opinions on the vocab usage as I'm not a native speaker and I'm focusing on improving my writing's naturalness.
Thanks,
Vinh