Kiianiinw
Mar 20, 2018
Undergraduate / Study Plan for Undergraduate Dance major : I Found My Dream [5]
@Holt I am sorry, there are some mistakes in compilation of sentences, here is the correct essay. The following is an improvement of my personal statement using the various suggestions that have been given. I am very grateful if you are willing to give some suggestions.
I was born in a family that loves art. Although we are not rich, but I feel very blessed. My parents have a big influence in shaping my mindset and character. Both of my parents are Bachelor of Arch. My father is not only good at drawing, but also proficient at handy craft. My mother was going to take fashion design department, but constrained in financial problem, so she takes architecture instead. They always concern about my education. My Father always said that he hoped me and my sister can get a better start than they used to be. They always worked hard to provide our education tuition and make sure that we get the best education we can have. Both of my parents are an open minded person. We often discuss many things together and they give me an advice and opinions from their point of view.
During high school, I took both traditional and modern dance extracurricular which exercise schedule is almost every day for a week. It may be draining my energy, but I really enjoy it. My Coach also chose me to be a leader and participate in various events or competitions and multiply my experience in the field of dance. My parents always support me in doing my hobby as long it did not interfere with my study. When they have a chance they will come to watch and support me on my competitions. They also support me to enroll in a dance school when I am an adult to learn the fundamentals of dance if that is my passion. They encourage my love for art. Dancing has taught me to seize the moment and allows me to be myself. The more I learn it the more I fall in love with dance, and then I realize I have my passion in dancing, and I am going to be a professional choreographer for the rest of my life. My favorite role model is May J and Lia Kim. I chose the choreography because I genuinely enjoy and feel motivated to learn about it and it will give me a range of skill so that I would get maximum value to support my passion. I managed to earn several awards in dance competitions such as 1st winner Dance Competition Engineering Expo Riau University and 2nd winner Dance Competition Festival Music Polytechnic Caltex Riau.
The first obstacle I had faced is in my country which art, especially dance is not very popular, and being a dancer is not a promising future. Although my academic records are quite good, but the only thing that I like is dance. While most of my friends tend to choose majors that popular like accounting, management, etc., which much needed now than follow their passion. The second is about my financial problem. My sister's college tuition is enough to burden my parents. I do not want to add a burden to them. Study abroad is something I never imagined before, it is out of my reach. On the other hand start a dance career in my country is not a good choice.
So I started to search about scholarship program which have a dance major, and that is how I found out about Korea National University of Arts. The first time I saw about Korea National University of Art, I had a feeling there is where I am supposed to be and will be. I started to research about Korea National University of Arts and found it is the best option that I have. It gave me a glimmer of hope and arousing my fighting spirit. I like the approach this university takes to my course and the facilities here for my subject are second to none. Seen from the magnitude of world interest in the country of Korea lately, especially Korean pop, Korea already has an impact worldwide. Which makes me believe it is a good point to start learning from Korea and it should be a very ideal choice in studying dance. I will be able to develop my dance skills and start my career. Learning directly about Korean lifestyles, league, history, and culture will give me the best lesson and experience.
In fact, there are some people from my country who have entered into Korea National University of Arts. This makes me quite motivated. If they can do it, why cannot I? So in the one last year I started to prepare all the necessary qualifications and focusing on this scholarship. I started to look for Korean language courses which was very limited because I do not live in big cities in Indonesia. I started to learn from tutoring teacher, the internet, books, video, music, etc. After 2 months I take the TOPIK exam and pass level 2 with satisfactory result.
@Holt I am sorry, there are some mistakes in compilation of sentences, here is the correct essay. The following is an improvement of my personal statement using the various suggestions that have been given. I am very grateful if you are willing to give some suggestions.
I Found My Dream
I was born in a family that loves art. Although we are not rich, but I feel very blessed. My parents have a big influence in shaping my mindset and character. Both of my parents are Bachelor of Arch. My father is not only good at drawing, but also proficient at handy craft. My mother was going to take fashion design department, but constrained in financial problem, so she takes architecture instead. They always concern about my education. My Father always said that he hoped me and my sister can get a better start than they used to be. They always worked hard to provide our education tuition and make sure that we get the best education we can have. Both of my parents are an open minded person. We often discuss many things together and they give me an advice and opinions from their point of view.
During high school, I took both traditional and modern dance extracurricular which exercise schedule is almost every day for a week. It may be draining my energy, but I really enjoy it. My Coach also chose me to be a leader and participate in various events or competitions and multiply my experience in the field of dance. My parents always support me in doing my hobby as long it did not interfere with my study. When they have a chance they will come to watch and support me on my competitions. They also support me to enroll in a dance school when I am an adult to learn the fundamentals of dance if that is my passion. They encourage my love for art. Dancing has taught me to seize the moment and allows me to be myself. The more I learn it the more I fall in love with dance, and then I realize I have my passion in dancing, and I am going to be a professional choreographer for the rest of my life. My favorite role model is May J and Lia Kim. I chose the choreography because I genuinely enjoy and feel motivated to learn about it and it will give me a range of skill so that I would get maximum value to support my passion. I managed to earn several awards in dance competitions such as 1st winner Dance Competition Engineering Expo Riau University and 2nd winner Dance Competition Festival Music Polytechnic Caltex Riau.
The first obstacle I had faced is in my country which art, especially dance is not very popular, and being a dancer is not a promising future. Although my academic records are quite good, but the only thing that I like is dance. While most of my friends tend to choose majors that popular like accounting, management, etc., which much needed now than follow their passion. The second is about my financial problem. My sister's college tuition is enough to burden my parents. I do not want to add a burden to them. Study abroad is something I never imagined before, it is out of my reach. On the other hand start a dance career in my country is not a good choice.
So I started to search about scholarship program which have a dance major, and that is how I found out about Korea National University of Arts. The first time I saw about Korea National University of Art, I had a feeling there is where I am supposed to be and will be. I started to research about Korea National University of Arts and found it is the best option that I have. It gave me a glimmer of hope and arousing my fighting spirit. I like the approach this university takes to my course and the facilities here for my subject are second to none. Seen from the magnitude of world interest in the country of Korea lately, especially Korean pop, Korea already has an impact worldwide. Which makes me believe it is a good point to start learning from Korea and it should be a very ideal choice in studying dance. I will be able to develop my dance skills and start my career. Learning directly about Korean lifestyles, league, history, and culture will give me the best lesson and experience.
In fact, there are some people from my country who have entered into Korea National University of Arts. This makes me quite motivated. If they can do it, why cannot I? So in the one last year I started to prepare all the necessary qualifications and focusing on this scholarship. I started to look for Korean language courses which was very limited because I do not live in big cities in Indonesia. I started to learn from tutoring teacher, the internet, books, video, music, etc. After 2 months I take the TOPIK exam and pass level 2 with satisfactory result.