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Posts by shannyn92
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shannyn92   
Sep 4, 2009
Undergraduate / "America's Best Colleges" guide - UCF Admissions Essay Help? [16]

Hi there, I'm not sure if this is too short or not. I know that I have to do two essays and combined they cant be more than 500 words or 7000 characters so yeah. Criticism is encouraged!!

I vividly remember the day I picked up U.S. News & World Report's 2010 "America's Best Colleges" guide. Browsing through it I saw various articles Top Ivy League Schools, Best Medical Programs, Largest Campus', etc. The article that really interested me, however, was the one titled "Top 5 National Universities To Watch". I was interested in reading about schools that may not be nationally known yet, but have the potential to become a school people would talk about. University of Central Florida was the first to catch my eye. "A Florida school?" I thought to myself, having previously read mostly about New York or California schools. I read on, and after online research and a visit to the campus, my mind was made up - UCF was the school for me. In addition to being a great up-and-coming school, UCF has the ideal location for my major. There is quite possibly no place better to hone my hospitality knowledge than a city that is the home of huge attractions such as Disney World and Universal Studios. The central location of the University of Central Florida is also ideal for work when I graduate from college, due to the copious (amount of) hotels and resorts resided around the University. Aside from academic reasons, UCF is a relatively new and beautiful campus with what seems like a lot of potential to become a top notch school.

also, the (amount of) thats parenthesized is because I dont know whether or not its copious hotels or copious amount of hotels
shannyn92   
Sep 4, 2009
Undergraduate / "America's Best Colleges" guide - UCF Admissions Essay Help? [16]

Thank you tal, I appreciate your response. The thing is I'm very confused on the feedback I've been getting. I just gave it to my English teacher and she said she loved it and liked the approach, etc. I posted it on here and I get pretty much the complete opposite. I hope you can understand my confusion and frustration.
shannyn92   
Sep 4, 2009
Undergraduate / "America's Best Colleges" guide - UCF Admissions Essay Help? [16]

The prompt is to describe why you want to attend ucf and she liked how I started in specifically and thought adding the hospitality thing about Disney was a good idea haha. I wasn't exaggerating when I said exact opposite :-P
shannyn92   
Sep 4, 2009
Undergraduate / "America's Best Colleges" guide - UCF Admissions Essay Help? [16]

Does anyone have any feedback then on what I could possibly right about? I've been trying to find more information on the rosen hospitality campus since that's the major I want to go to but the website kind of just talks about the admissions process versus what they offer.
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