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Oct 17, 2017
Writing Feedback / Nowadays, a lot of new, big supermarkets are appearing every day - what about local business? [4]
Dear @just_writer,
Your essay structure is quite good.
In the first paragraph as a reader, I expected some positive points about small businesses that can supports that they could compete.
The second paragraph is well organized but you could add a simple example of purchasing a special thing.
In the conclusion, some points expressed that not discussed before like "they change their business plan tiny bit".
/many/ big supermarkets
Hope it is helpful.
Dear @just_writer,
Your essay structure is quite good.
In the first paragraph as a reader, I expected some positive points about small businesses that can supports that they could compete.
The second paragraph is well organized but you could add a simple example of purchasing a special thing.
In the conclusion, some points expressed that not discussed before like "they change their business plan tiny bit".
/many/ big supermarkets
Hope it is helpful.