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Sep 7, 2009
Undergraduate / "Don't just say it, do it", says my DAD; Person who had a significant influence on me [5]
Because of the lower education he can not work in a comfortable place so after he had save enough money he had open a restaurant with all his saving, but working in a restaurant is really not a easy job. ** long run on sentence. Also, your subject-verb agreement is off throughout the essay.
Finally, my dad is a important role in my life.** Not sure what you are trying to say..he played an important role? or he is an important role model?
It is a nice subject, however, the meaning of the essay lacks clarity due to grammar errors
Because of the lower education he can not work in a comfortable place so after he had save enough money he had open a restaurant with all his saving, but working in a restaurant is really not a easy job. ** long run on sentence. Also, your subject-verb agreement is off throughout the essay.
Finally, my dad is a important role in my life.** Not sure what you are trying to say..he played an important role? or he is an important role model?
It is a nice subject, however, the meaning of the essay lacks clarity due to grammar errors