Scholarship / ESSAY FOR SCHOLARSHIP in Japan, Toyo University (SELF-INTRODUCTION) [5]

I am writing to apply for a scholarship in Japan. The essay consists of 3 part and here is the first one:

the Self-Introduction

Thank you for reading. Please tell me what you think about it.

This is a girl from the humble countryside of Vietnam, looking for chance to change her life forever after.
My name is Dang Ngoc Thien Kim and now, I am a final-year student in Tang Bat Ho Upper Secondary School in Binh Dinh, Vietnam. As you can see from the beginning, I am trying all my best to make the biggest change in my life: attending Toyo University.

I was born in a small town in Binh Dinh. As the second-born child, I receive the love and care from my parents as well as my brother, growing up to be a girl who is full of energy and enthusiasm. I have been a vice monitor for 3 years as I scored the highest in the entrance exam among my classmates. It gives me a chance to be a leader, helps me to develop my leadership skills. Thanks for that, I was able to bring my team to the first prize in the English Speaking contest held for all students in the grade. In my class, I also helps my friends to solve their difficulties while studying, especially in English-my favorite and my most proficient subject.

My love for English is stemmed from my brother, through the first English song he played for me, "Numb" of Linkin Park. Since then, I have realized that English is so wonderful that it connects people all over the world, enables them to communicate and share thoughts with each other.

I started my first English classes when I was nine years old and studied quite well at this subject. When I was twelve, I took my first prize on the contest for Gifted Students. I have been learning English for eight years, enrolling in many contests such as the Excellent Student contest, Violympic English, and receiving some prizes as well as gaining a huge amount of knowledge.

Though I express myself as a sociable person, I used to be very shy and quiet person. Deciding to apply for Toyo University is the first time I have made such a challenging decision. However, I believe that it is not a bad choice. If I am accepted, I will be able to study in a modern environment, learn more about the world, in order to improve myself and become a successful person.