Speeches / Speech in the form of auto-presentation for school interview [2]

self introduce for school interview

Good morning teachers and fellow candidates
I'm yvoone from XXX government secondary school
This is my honour to speak here today
I remember when I was still the junior form student I made my determination to become a nurse cus that day I was going to have a review check with my parents unfortunately they're both are classified as hypertension and diabetes

as we all known those are chronic diseases once i have made the decision I tried to attend some related courses cus I know my academics results are not as good as the others that's why I would like to put more effort in the extra curriculum or the courses to absorb more theory as much as I can

Thereby i can confirm my determination and I can get more knowledge for guiding my parents to return the correct living Style
For the passing years I was keep trying different courses like venous cannulation and blood taking courses , care related supporting courses and exercise therapy courses so I can get more preperation for my dream

Practical experience is also important apart from the theory part, that's why I I have joined the quality health care nursing agency for about 2 years they can offer me an opportunity that I can really work under a real situation in hospital right now I'm engaging another part time job as well that is a dental clinic

Through this experience I was hoping that I can show enough of my passion and how eager that I want to become a nurse
At last, I want to say thank you again for having me today
Thank you

this is my self-introduce speech can anybody help me to do the correction? I know my sentence structure and grammar are not perfect, that's why I'm asking for help

plz plz plz