Undergraduate / "The future / Community service" - U of I Short essays [6]

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First prompt is asking for a 300 words or less on where I discuss my academic interests and/or professional goals.

1] John has just lost his job, his house, and nearly everything in his life that he holds dear. The economy has failed him but the young generation of today has the power to change the outlook on his future. People will always cheat, which affects not only us, but generations in the future. It is important to be knowledgeable and proactive about ways to prevent it, especially from an economical standpoint. By finding a niche in the economic field, corrupt governments and economic crises can be combated. It is our responsibility to try whatever we can to restore a stable economy on a personal level. The world of finance is fascinating because of how many different levels it has. Every single person is affected by money, whether losing it, receiving it, or giving it away. To be able to put myself in situations where I can help monitor and benefit people's lives forever would be meaningful and a huge accomplishment. Not everyone has the capability or time to manage their money, which is why I have always felt that people like accountants and stockbrokers often do the most to help others prepare for dealing with economic issues. I am passionate about pursuing the world of finance and business, knowing that my hard work will undoubtedly help those who need it. The multi-faceted approach to finance is one that I find will be ideal for me, with my interest in mathematics and the desire to help others.

Second is to choose one extracurricular activity, work experience or community service project and explain how I initially chose it, why I continued with it, and how I benefited from it.

2] I had the privilege and was fortunate enough to get the chance to work for my mother by helping transport the elderly in a physical therapy rehabilitation center. Going into the experience, I expected boredom and cranky, lonely grandparents. Coming out of it, though, I found myself with a newly gained insight and knowledge I never expected. This job was obtained because of an accident when an employee scheduled to work for my mom had an emergency, and thus could not come in for the job. Because it happened last minute, and I was looking at a work-free summer, I was recruited. Soon, I found myself eagerly going to work, anticipating the days ahead. I learned vast amounts of information I knew I definitely could not learn in school. The people I helped told me stories of their youth and teenage years, of life lessons they learned, and provided advice for my future-one told me hard work always pays off. I was able to bridge the gap between generations I had thought previously impossible. It was fascinating and a whole new environment which I was never exposed to. To this day I think about the privileges I take for granted such as walking, or going to the restroom on my own. I think back and reflect to the quarterback who was now in a wheelchair, to the class valedictorian who now could barely recognize her family, and wonder what could be done. Not only was I able to absorb their stories and challenges, but I was able to learn patience and understanding as well. I want to be able to help more as I grow, regardless of the career I choose. I know for a fact that I will incorporate my time with the elderly into my future, and will help as much as possible.