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Name: Sayan Biswas
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Jul 8, 2018
Undergraduate / Astronauts and Planets - Common APP Writing section |Prompt 6| [2]

Okay so here is my common app essay on the Prompt 6, if you like or do not like please say, be blunt in insulting as I wish to extract the best essay out of my brain.

Prompt ::: Describe a topic, idea, or concept you find so engaging that it makes you lose all track of time. Why does it captivate you? What or who do you turn to when you want to learn more?

My Essay

The mystery of cosmos



What is the secret of the Cosmos? Why we are here? Why only the Pale blue dot has life? How tiny lifeless quarks, create atoms which combine to form living human beings and other species? How small we are compared to the whole cosmos and whats that equation that is the code for this Grand programmed Cosmos? These are some of the quenchers for my thirst in the area of Space and Exploration.

A childhood dream of becoming an Astronaut, to reach the ISS, well in my childhood age I only knew about the ISS, once crushed by the society near me, has once again been awakened by books and films. It pokes my mind all the times that, the Big Bang that happened 13.7 billion years ago created all the matter and energy that forms the present universe. We know that Hydrogen was the first and only element to be formed, and stars were formed out of it. These big stars created the higher elements in their super duper hot nuclear reactors which we find today in out bones and body as Calcium and Carbon. Isn't that amazing? Looking at my hand and thinking that it was formed inside a big bright star? Its just fascinating to think, how we all are connected to each other, and, we all to the Cosmos, it makes the mind peaceful when you return home after a busy day.

This concept is so vast that it needs a lot and lot of dreaming and imagination, to know why you too are reading this essay? Is anybody controlling you or did anyone controlled me when I was writing the essay like we control the Sims? Who knows perhaps yes? perhaps no.

I love reading books on Space and Astrophysics in my lease time such as, on the train and in the school car. Every time a book is completed I feel great to have such beautiful facts about our Cosmos. To speak specifically, I love reading books on rockets too, can be confusing to choose between the two : Astronautics or Astrophysics.

After going through countdowns and watching a lot of rocket launches, I thought of building a rocket by myself, I didn't knew about sugar powered rockets then. After I came to know about the Sugar Rocket (powered by R-Candy) I fought, yeah literally fought to built it. India is a place where you get Potassium Nitrate only in laboratories and at a very high cost in the plant shop. My Mom and Dad clearly said no a thousand times as they believed that I would burn my hands and face in an accident with the rocket. Somehow, I made them believe that there won't be any problem and launched bought an container. Till now I tested two rocket motors, sadly both of them were a flop. So, I thought I need more knowledge and hence wandering on the internet I found edX, MITOCW, Coursera and great sites to learn rocket science. They truly helped me fill my gap of knowledge for rockets and also various topics. I wish to launch another sugar rocket soon.

Till know all the books I have read, have changed my views on how I saw things before. After going through these deep ideas, my eyes views things as nothing but a group of subatomic particles. The thing that saddens me is some of the greatest problems we face, one of them is war. Lets have a world where we do not have weapons, where we do not have Egoistic leaders for whom their whole country suffers. Even one of the greater problem is poverty and the ever demand of energy especially green energy. Using the Space's lush and rich resources we can easily feed ourselves without harming our own Earth for example using Asteroid mining and Solar Energy. Atlast, we all are here alone on this Planet.
PROFsabi   
Jun 28, 2018
Undergraduate / |Common App| Caltech Essay - Scientific exploration clearly excites you [4]

Hello my friends and seniors,
This is my first post in EssayForum so if by chance there is any mistake please edit that.

I was just writing my Caltech Personal essay for Why I should choose Caltech. I am posting my essay for knowing my essay skills, and would it be a good fit for the prompt. Feel free to point out mistakes.

Application to Caltech essay



Prompt:
Scientific exploration clearly excites you. Beyond our 3:1 student-to-faculty ratio and our intense focus on research opportunities, how do you believe Caltech will best fuel your intellectual curiosity and help you meet your goals? (500 word max):::

Essay:
For me, Scientific exploration is something that I want to dedicate my life, so that my contributions can make the Earth a better place to live, and even beyond Earth say one day when SpaceX or NASA's SLS will take us to far beyond Earth. What I think is, Caltech has one of the brightest minds in field of Astrophysics and Aerospace engineering and these two subjects are my true love.

But I'm bit confused about how to choose within the two because probably I won't be allowed to pursue both. I wished to be an Astronaut since a long time, I still wish today to be so. My family probably won't like the idea of seeing me sitting in a Soyuz capsule as the only reason they say, I am skinny and thin and I would die on a spacecraft. Chances are that I would not be accepted as an Astronaut but still I will apply once I complete my Postgraduate Studies.

Caltech has the legendary Jet Propulsion Laboratory, a lot of videos by NASA in Youtube shows the JPL logo at the end, especially the Cassini Mission, one of my favorite missions. When I was young I used to see those videos and always dreamt of working with NASA. And studying there would be more fun. I am just astonished to see how there is no student-professor barrier that is prevalent in a lot of places. Professors are cool at Caltech, you know, I saw the "Discovery of Planet IX" video in which Mike Brown and his student just explained the stuff so beautifully. I think, all the edX and MOOCs I have taken will help me a lot in coping up with the difference in American Education system and the Indian Education system. And Caltech can help me extract my inner space scientist in the best possible way. I feel that Caltech is the place that can feed my thirst and curiosity for the Cosmos and "The theory of Everything", Caltech's motivating culture and people suits me the best.
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