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I was just writing my Caltech Personal essay for Why I should choose Caltech. I am posting my essay for knowing my essay skills, and would it be a good fit for the prompt. Feel free to point out mistakes.
Application to Caltech essayPrompt:
Scientific exploration clearly excites you. Beyond our 3:1 student-to-faculty ratio and our intense focus on research opportunities, how do you believe Caltech will best fuel your intellectual curiosity and help you meet your goals? (500 word max):::
For me, Scientific exploration is something that I want to dedicate my life, so that my contributions can make the Earth a better place to live, and even beyond Earth say one day when SpaceX or NASA's SLS will take us to far beyond Earth. What I think is, Caltech has one of the brightest minds in field of Astrophysics and Aerospace engineering and these two subjects are my true love.
But I'm bit confused about how to choose within the two because probably I won't be allowed to pursue both. I wished to be an Astronaut since a long time, I still wish today to be so. My family probably won't like the idea of seeing me sitting in a Soyuz capsule as the only reason they say, I am skinny and thin and I would die on a spacecraft. Chances are that I would not be accepted as an Astronaut but still I will apply once I complete my Postgraduate Studies.
Caltech has the legendary Jet Propulsion Laboratory, a lot of videos by NASA in Youtube shows the JPL logo at the end, especially the Cassini Mission, one of my favorite missions. When I was young I used to see those videos and always dreamt of working with NASA. And studying there would be more fun. I am just astonished to see how there is no student-professor barrier that is prevalent in a lot of places. Professors are cool at Caltech, you know, I saw the "Discovery of Planet IX" video in which Mike Brown and his student just explained the stuff so beautifully. I think, all the edX and MOOCs I have taken will help me a lot in coping up with the difference in American Education system and the Indian Education system. And Caltech can help me extract my inner space scientist in the best possible way. I feel that Caltech is the place that can feed my thirst and curiosity for the Cosmos and "The theory of Everything", Caltech's motivating culture and people suits me the best.