Writing Feedback / It is possible to prevent and solve the problems connected with living in a foreign country [3]

Dear all,
Here is my practice IELTS task 2. I will be appreciated if you could give me some advice from the perspective of a native speaker. Thank you!

Living abroad

Write about the following topic:
Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

My essay:
Many people believe that living abroad results in social problems. Although I agree there are many drawbacks living in a foreign country, I believe it is possible to prevent and solve the problem and I will not see it in a negative way.

There are many difficulties that foreigners encounter, such as loneliness, language barrier, and cultural differences. From my personal experience living in Mexico as a foreigner for two years, I had experienced all the challenges. For example, most Latin people are not always punctual or honest. Foreigners usually feel offended and upset when they do not keep their promises. The culture shock sometimes made me feel worse homesick and more struggle when I tried to communicate the problem with an unfamiliar language.

However, I would still argue it is beneficial for both foreigners and the society. The experience could help not only foreigners but also local people widen their knowledge base and become more flexible in the future. Take myself, for example, I have learned to observe people from their actions instead of their words. I also become less judgemental while facing new problems because I know it is important to be humble and respectful all the time. This attitude can also help to eliminate misunderstanding and reduce potential social problems.

In conclusion, I agree living in a foreign country is never easy but I believe it will not lead to serious problems by knowing how to adjust mindset whether being a foreigner or accepting foreigners in our hometown.