Posts by loserish

loserish

Dec 9, 2009

Undergraduate / A South Dakota backpacking trip - Common App the experience one [6]

thanks so much
I can't believe i didn't put my age
i was thinking about the major but they are different for different schools

loserish

Dec 6, 2009

Undergraduate / A South Dakota backpacking trip - Common App the experience one [6]

hey man i think this is pretty good.
compared to the beginning the end the does seem weaker
i think maybe if you a better transition from your turn doing the trails into why the school will help you even more

loserish

Sep 20, 2009

Undergraduate / Common App - Influential Person (my dad) [3]

Hey Guys! I could really use some help with my essay. I don't know if i'm doing it right for the question.
Don't have a title either if you guys have suggestions

My dad has been called many things; a crook, a scammer or even a bum, but to me he is something different. To me he is an inspiration. Through all of his ups and downs he has shown me how I should not be and how I should not act. His life has not been perfect in anyway and he will be the first to admit it. He has been in jail for a good chunk of my life and he has taught me to use his mistakes as a way to grow as a person.

When he first came to the country he made sure to put my family first at whatever the cost. Before he brought my mom over he had rented an apartment and had a job ready for her. They soon had me and my sister and me. A few years after my birth he became friends with the wrong people but he did it to get us a better life. At the age of 6 he was arrested for smuggling in illegal substances from the Dominican Republic. Before he went in to a federal prison he made sure to leave us enough money to last us for a while because he didn't know when he would be back. He came back when I was 12. I was the first to see him when he returned. He apologized for not being there but he told me he now saw a man who had his eyes set on the future and wouldn't fall to the world's hardships. He told me he looked up to me and would try to make me proud to be his son.

As I am writing this he is screaming at me and my family through the door. He went drinking after a stressful day at work and returned a bit unwound. He came through the door and slammed a glass on the floor and began to yell about how he gave us everything but never gave anything to himself. I haven't cried since he first came back from jail but today I did. He looked at me and told me to not be like him and go to go for my dreams while I had the chance. I refuse to tell him this but I am like him. We both have dreams of helping out those we care for and are willing to do what must be done to achieve those dreams. I am proud of him and now I want to make him proud of me.

Any criticism is appreciated!