Posts by komziiie

komziiie

Oct 16, 2018

Graduate / AASSupporting Statements. How did you choose your proposed Course and Inst. M. Accounting ANU [4]

Hi Seskussaa,

First paragraph is second sentence is too long. Break it into smaller few smaller sentences. Start would feel more commanding if something like - As a tax auditor at Directorate General of Tax Ministry of finance, I strongly feel that some areas in tax audit policy need amending. Unstructured financial statements of taxpayers makes audit extremely difficult to analyze. Formatting this unstructured statements into meaningful ready-to-analyze financial information costs most valuable resource - Time.

Don't use aforementioned in a statement. No need to say that.

komziiie

Oct 15, 2018

Graduate / I am the master of my fate and I am the captain of my soul. Business Analytics Master SOP [3]

Hello Everyone,

I am new to the forum and here to get some feedback on my statement of purpose for the graduate school. Kindly review and let me know your feedback. Thank you.

Statement of purpose for Masters in Business Analysis

I am the master of my fate and I am the captain of my soul. This is the poem that describes my nature, my grit, my tenacity and my commitment to succeed in life endeavors. It has been long journey to lead me to the path of Masters in Business Analytics.

I excelled in math and science and I pursued my Diploma and Bachelor Degree in Computer Science.

During the academic period I was introduced to the extensive knowledge of variety of subjects. One that grab my attention was big data and data analytics. I equipped myself with extensive knowledge of database and algorithms which deals with database handling. I developed advance skills in SQL, C++, Python and Database management. In order to be self independent and support my undergraduate study, I started working as an event planner part time with at XYZ Company. Event planning is very unpredictable and season business. With the support of the manager and other team members we started to use overall data analytics for forecasting the events. We used predictive analysis about the future trends and business. We implemented online surveys and I proposed to use google analytics.

Upon graduation engineer would be the most common career choice for me. But I had my dreams to travel the world and experience different people and their culture. I made a bold choice to work with XXX Company prestigious international airline as a cabin crew. I visited 40 different countries and 100s of different destinations in the world. The job equipped me with the unprecedented customer service. It trained me to be a people person, a leader and to manage work under extremely stressful situation everyday. During my tenure as cabin senior at XYZ Airline the complexity of scheduling roster for the flight and managing resources and keeping flight up in in the air fascinated me.

After my marriage I quit my job, got my affairs in order and moved to United States on spouse dependent visa. It has become extremely difficult find work without work visa and I started pursuing my passion for dancing and photography. Eventually started part time job with XYZ Company as a Specialist on temporary work permit. With the visa issues I had to go back to India for five months.

During this period I looked deep into my passion and my career options. A part of is more of business management person and other part of me is an engineer who solves the problem.

And it all come back to me connecting dots about my computer science knowledge, my customer service and management experience and my passion to work with data analytics. I decided to make the pivotal shift in my career and combine the best of two worlds.

At this point, it became clear that I would like to work with Airline industry in the field of business analytics that they employ in everyday system. I dream to run the analytics department at prestigious airline in United States and I believe the degree at XYZ University will help me with that. I looked into details of the program and talked to Alumni, graduate admission advisor. I researched the companies that collaborating with XYZ. And I believe that XYZ would be the best platform to achieve my dreams.