kasifcheng
Oct 28, 2018
Writing Feedback / Using credit card is a process that gets benefits and burdens [3]
Hi Holt,
Thanks you for your review, I attempt to pass for an English writing test, which difficulty might similar with IELTS paper 2. I was an University student in Hong Kong, however, I was failed for the exam for once. To pass for the exam, I intend to improve grammar, usage and style. Therefore, I write whatever I learn from English books to do practice.
That is my situation, and the paragraph 3 is revised as below.
Due to a high consuming incentive of using a credit card, these card owners easily struggle the intolerable bills. When they received an expensive monthly statement, which even higher than their monthly income, they would be forced by the bank in debt. Since then, the debt would be accumulated with late charges and other service fees. Consequently, this financial burden collapses victims' living, and they need to maintain the lower consuming standard to repay debt.
B.rgds
Kasif
Hi Holt,
Thanks you for your review, I attempt to pass for an English writing test, which difficulty might similar with IELTS paper 2. I was an University student in Hong Kong, however, I was failed for the exam for once. To pass for the exam, I intend to improve grammar, usage and style. Therefore, I write whatever I learn from English books to do practice.
That is my situation, and the paragraph 3 is revised as below.
Due to a high consuming incentive of using a credit card, these card owners easily struggle the intolerable bills. When they received an expensive monthly statement, which even higher than their monthly income, they would be forced by the bank in debt. Since then, the debt would be accumulated with late charges and other service fees. Consequently, this financial burden collapses victims' living, and they need to maintain the lower consuming standard to repay debt.
B.rgds
Kasif