NickNice
Nov 1, 2018
Writing Feedback / Taking life to the extreme - risk-taking activities for TOEFL [2]
Can anyone review and score the Independent essay writing for TOEFL.
topic:
Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
My essay:
Are Dangerous sports indeed dangerous? People would not afford lives for fun, if sports were intact dangerous. There is fun involved in the courageous activities. It takes physical and emotional wellness to think of doing such activities.
Dangerous sports are fun as long as they are managed. With proper physical maintenance and emotional balance, the risks involved in such sports can be overcome. It is no more a danger but fun. Otherwise, two teenagers from India of age 25 years would not challenge themselves to climb Mountains Everest and be successful.
Finally, with proper risk mitigation plan one can afford dangerous sports.
Can anyone review and score the Independent essay writing for TOEFL.
topic:
Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
My essay:
The Thrill of risk-taking
Are Dangerous sports indeed dangerous? People would not afford lives for fun, if sports were intact dangerous. There is fun involved in the courageous activities. It takes physical and emotional wellness to think of doing such activities.
Dangerous sports are fun as long as they are managed. With proper physical maintenance and emotional balance, the risks involved in such sports can be overcome. It is no more a danger but fun. Otherwise, two teenagers from India of age 25 years would not challenge themselves to climb Mountains Everest and be successful.
Finally, with proper risk mitigation plan one can afford dangerous sports.
