Ken Adams
Nov 16, 2018
Writing Feedback / An IELTS task 2 essay on noise control [4]
Hi @Tunanut, you did a great essay.
I kind of have something that it can improve your essay:
While some argue that people could be free to make noise as they please. When you have a strongly statement afterwards, it would be better to give a general statement.
to make your writing more formal and academic, you should avoid using the speaking phrase : I can see ( it's seem that) , Looking at the argument in this side, I side with
Try to give a balance answer, and develop your first body paragraph 1 deeper to convince the opinion.
Hi @Tunanut, you did a great essay.
I kind of have something that it can improve your essay:
While some argue that people could be free to make noise as they please. When you have a strongly statement afterwards, it would be better to give a general statement.
to make your writing more formal and academic, you should avoid using the speaking phrase : I can see ( it's seem that) , Looking at the argument in this side, I side with
Try to give a balance answer, and develop your first body paragraph 1 deeper to convince the opinion.