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Nov 23, 2018
Undergraduate / "post undergraduate goals" - Berkeley's HAAS business school application essay [2]
The prompt is: "Describe your immediate post-undergraduate goals. Why is a business degree from Berkeley Haas essential in helping you achieve these goals?" It is a 500 word max essay. I definitely think the grammar and transitions need work but I want to know if it is a good essay conceptually before I make grammar edits. I will appreciate any feedback. Here is the essay:
While studying at Berkeley for the past year, I came to realize that one of the most common questions asked is my choice of major. While others can answer this question with a simple "I study electrical engineering" or "I am a business major," my response is a little more complicated. I intend to double major in both biology and business.
When I voice this choice of major, I am almost always met with a confused expression, often followed by a "why would you do that to yourself?" The truth is that I have noticed that business knowledge is vital for almost every career field, since the free market is the main driving force of innovation. Even as I interned at Lam Research this summer- a company where I was focused on running chemical processes- the key aspects of business were everywhere. We had to speed up the reactions in the chamber in order to cut costs, we had to change our process settings to our customer's specifications in order to build customer relations, and we had to complete our recipe in time in order to improve company earnings for that quarter. Through this, I learned that knowledge of business principles is essential to working in the industry.
This is the reason why, after I complete my undergraduate studies, I wish to pursue a dual MD/MBA degree. I want to open my own practice in the future, and I will need to learn the foundations of business in order to achieve this goal. That is why a business degree from Haas is essential. I want to learn about different business models, strategies and applications for my own business. I want to learn how to create a professional network for my business, how to finance it, and how to market it properly. All of these are skills that I can learn from Berkeley Haas.
This desire to learn is one of the Haas defining principles, and it resonates with me intensely. I believe that I can learn a lot from the world of business even while working in a biological field. Business strategies have already been applied to technological fields, which was a major factor for the technological revolution of the 21st century, so why not apply these strategies to medicine? That is why, even though my choice of major may be surprising at first, it is essential to achieving my goals in the future.
The prompt is: "Describe your immediate post-undergraduate goals. Why is a business degree from Berkeley Haas essential in helping you achieve these goals?" It is a 500 word max essay. I definitely think the grammar and transitions need work but I want to know if it is a good essay conceptually before I make grammar edits. I will appreciate any feedback. Here is the essay:
applying Business strategies to medicine
While studying at Berkeley for the past year, I came to realize that one of the most common questions asked is my choice of major. While others can answer this question with a simple "I study electrical engineering" or "I am a business major," my response is a little more complicated. I intend to double major in both biology and business.
When I voice this choice of major, I am almost always met with a confused expression, often followed by a "why would you do that to yourself?" The truth is that I have noticed that business knowledge is vital for almost every career field, since the free market is the main driving force of innovation. Even as I interned at Lam Research this summer- a company where I was focused on running chemical processes- the key aspects of business were everywhere. We had to speed up the reactions in the chamber in order to cut costs, we had to change our process settings to our customer's specifications in order to build customer relations, and we had to complete our recipe in time in order to improve company earnings for that quarter. Through this, I learned that knowledge of business principles is essential to working in the industry.
This is the reason why, after I complete my undergraduate studies, I wish to pursue a dual MD/MBA degree. I want to open my own practice in the future, and I will need to learn the foundations of business in order to achieve this goal. That is why a business degree from Haas is essential. I want to learn about different business models, strategies and applications for my own business. I want to learn how to create a professional network for my business, how to finance it, and how to market it properly. All of these are skills that I can learn from Berkeley Haas.
This desire to learn is one of the Haas defining principles, and it resonates with me intensely. I believe that I can learn a lot from the world of business even while working in a biological field. Business strategies have already been applied to technological fields, which was a major factor for the technological revolution of the 21st century, so why not apply these strategies to medicine? That is why, even though my choice of major may be surprising at first, it is essential to achieving my goals in the future.