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Nov 26, 2018
Writing Feedback / Ielts - the development of road access to a City Hospital from 2007 to 2010. [2]
I am practicing for the IELTS test, please help me check if I made any mistake and suggest me the grammar, the word I should use to get a high score. Thank you.
The pictures illustrate the development of road access to a City Hospital from 2007 to 2010. It is immediately apparent that there are significant alterations in term of amenities and infrastructure during this period.
The City Hospital is still located in the North area and surrounded by Ring Road which was integrated to City Road by means of Hospital Road having three couples of bus stops along the way in 2007. Three years later, the infrastructure experienced a considerable development in form of the road which has developed to be two roundabouts and located on each side of Hospital Road.
Regarding the year 2007, there was a car park addressed to the public and hospital's employees. Subsequently, in 2010, the alteration occurred in the car park that was divided to be two parts, car park for staff and car park for the public, located in two different areas. In addition, not only were all bus stops replaced by bus station placed to the West of Hospital Road but also linked with two roundabouts.
[Cambridge English IELTS 13 - Test 1]
I am practicing for the IELTS test, please help me check if I made any mistake and suggest me the grammar, the word I should use to get a high score. Thank you.
The pictures illustrate the development of road access to a City Hospital from 2007 to 2010. It is immediately apparent that there are significant alterations in term of amenities and infrastructure during this period.
The City Hospital is still located in the North area and surrounded by Ring Road which was integrated to City Road by means of Hospital Road having three couples of bus stops along the way in 2007. Three years later, the infrastructure experienced a considerable development in form of the road which has developed to be two roundabouts and located on each side of Hospital Road.
Regarding the year 2007, there was a car park addressed to the public and hospital's employees. Subsequently, in 2010, the alteration occurred in the car park that was divided to be two parts, car park for staff and car park for the public, located in two different areas. In addition, not only were all bus stops replaced by bus station placed to the West of Hospital Road but also linked with two roundabouts.
