Posts by petrij7
Name: Jenna Petri
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Last Post: Dec 27, 2018
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I've done nothing but read for the past two summers. - Princeton Supplemental [4]
You use a lot of short sentences, maybe try to mix up the sentence structure. I would try to emphasize on one topic either reading or your job. Your activities seem impressive and interesting but you counter yourself by saying they aren't. "From the weekly chapters of ongoing Shonen to completed Seinen masterpieces such as Inio Asano's "Goodnight Punpun," I devoured every piece of writing that I laid eyes upon. Albeit not impressive, I completed 53 series ranging from short one-shots to 700-chapter behemoths." Maybe try and combine these two ideas to make it flow better.
Undergraduate /
I see myself at Dartmouth -Dartmouth supplement (100) [6]
Your response is really nice! Maybe add something about how your love for your hometown would transfer smoothly into Dartmouth. I agree with @ Holt that adding the same latitude and such would create an easier transition for you. Other than that I think you conveyed your message eloquently.
Undergraduate /
Highly ranked programs - Why Syracuse Essay (250 max) [4]
i see myself thriving and enjoying there
My junior year I played around with a college search site, usually stuck to looking at schools along the west coast but I was compelled to look at schools in New York. Expecting to find schools in New York City, I came upon Syracuse. The highly ranked architecture program was what first got me to look deeper into the university and I started to look if it was a match for me. The number of opportunities for global studies, the dedication to students through programs such as AIAS, and the pride the school held in itself had me imagining what it would like to be apart of that. After talking about the school and answering Syracuse to the "Where are you going to college?" question, my parents decided we had to visit. The visit to the campus cemented my belief that the university was right for me. The history behind the school as well as the atmosphere had a great influence on my application. The size of Syracuse is what I believe will best suit my academics as the classes are personable but the resources of a large university are still available. On the plane ride to New York, I was scared that I wouldn't like the school and this trip would have been for nothing but I was happy to find a place that I could see myself thriving and enjoying for the next four years to come.
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