Posts by shrutishahh

shrutishahh

Feb 15, 2019

Graduate / Urban planning and real estate managemenet of Korea - KGSP/GKS personal statement [3]

Please grammar check your essay - you can use grammarly for this. For example, 'the' urban planning and my major 'was'
You have mentioned your final project was exciting. Try to talk about why. What interested you so much. perhaps a little bit about tour findings.

It seems impressive that you helped students realize rights? Talk about what kind of rights these were and how you did it.
Restructure the paragraph about Korean people and your international republic's culture. Instead of using vague words like culture fauna flora use some examples of what they could take from your cultures and what you could take from theirs.

Remove the last lime - dreams will come true. too cliche.

The content of the essay is good but needs sentence restructuring and grammar check.

shrutishahh

Feb 15, 2019

Graduate / Texas A&M MS in Marketing - why study at Mays [4]

The problem is that I cannot make it longer than this. If I add details about my background and a last paragraph I will have to take something out

shrutishahh

Feb 15, 2019

Graduate / Texas A&M MS in Marketing - why study at Mays [4]

Please review this essay
1. Why do you want to pursue this graduate program at Mays Business School?

While considering higher education, one of my biggest concerns was work experience. I wanted to create a strong foundation in marketing early in my professional life but I did not have the work experience to suit an MBA curriculum.

The MS in Marketing program at Mays Business School, in my opinion, addresses this very need.
The curriculum encompasses a strong foundation through subjects like Marketing Leadership (MKTG 670) along with specializations in my desired focus - brand management which I intend to integrate with a certification in analytics. The structure of the curriculum that is rooted in classroom training and branches out to marketing consulting projects with reputed companies like Adidas, Coca-cola and WalMart and summer internships is very mindful of the students being young professionals.

The presence of prominent individuals on the Advisory Board like Ms. Tami Cannizzaro, a certified career coach with a successful trajectory in strategic marketing and PR, not to mention the concept of an Advisory board itself, helps me understand that the course is focussed helping each student recognize the path to their individual career goals.

In Mays' own words it offers " a small school fee with the resources of a large university". It was very important to me, at this early stage in my career, to not put an excessive amount of financial pressure on myself or my family.